Draft Discussion Paper

by Jack Marozzi
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TIME SUBMITTED 27-MAR-2014 09:22PM
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FINAL GRADE
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Draft Discussion Paper
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Jack this is excellent- congratulations
Small issue Avoid long sentences- it detracts
from the coherence and clarity of your language. read
out aloud to yourself and when you require a breath
break the sentence down. Short and succinct
sentences make language much more powerful.
Also the 3rd paragraph was a little long. Split
paragraphs to ensure each idea is afforded
opportunity to be isolated and considered
individually.
Apart from this: exceptional. A pleasure to read.
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