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Dr. Whiterspoon
Personal Statement

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MLA sample paper.

Having conducted many months of research for the perfect medical school for my goals, Emory
University School of Medicine stood out. The school's website presented attributes that makes me feel
that I would be an awesome candidate for this school. I possess skills that include being genuine to
others, being a good listener, and being a positive influence on people I encounter in my daily life.
Entering a medical school takes a lot of work and a lot of dedication. The most important of all

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about attending a medical school is being genuine to other people, in which I believe that I am genuine
to those who I come in contact with. Being genuine is not always easy to do for others. As for me it is
the easiest thing that I know how to do well. Luke 3: 31 says And as ye would that men should do to

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you, do ye also to them likewise. In other words I treat people like how I want to be treated. As many

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people that I knew turned their backs against to me I treated them the same way. It takes a lot of
patience and respect to be genuine to others. Ever since I was little I was told "you are so genuine and
to never let anyone change you." I have stayed the same and it has gotten me a long way in life.
However, when it comes to following directions from others or listening to others speak I am a
good listener. I love to listening to people problems and trying to help them come up with a way to

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solve them. When directions are given I take in what is being said so that when its time to complete an

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assignment everything would be done correctly and in order that it was given. I listen to the tone of
people of voices and how they say things. I believe you can not do anything right if you do not listen
to what is being said to you.

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Furthermore, I always have a positive influence on people who I encounter in my daily life.
There is always a moment you will see me giving a person encouraging words. I would do my best to
try to make that person day a lot better than what it was already. I believe that everybody should hear
positive words and be around people that are positive. I am not the type of person to sit back and watch
someone hurt in pain. I always take the time out to make a difference in their lives. Just a few simple
words would make someone else day brighter. You can ask around and people would tell you that I am
not the person who always dwell in the past, worry about stuff, and think negative all the time. I am
the type person who likes to go on with their life and be happy. I make it my job to be a positive
influence on people I meet. I try to give them hope, a better understanding on life, and that they should
never give up no matter how hard the road gets.
In summary, I conducted many research on finding the perfect medical school. However one

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stood out and that was Emory University School of Medicine. I had a wonderful feeling that I would

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be a great candidate for this school. I posses skills like being genuine to others, being a good listener,

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introduction.

and being a positive influence on people who I come into contact with. Being genuine is the easiest
thing that I know how to do well. Also I treat others the same way even though they turned their backs

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against to me. When it comes to following directions or listening to others speak I am good listener.
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Lastly I am a positive influence on people who I encounter in my daily life. I try to make people's day
brighter then what it was before.

COMMENTS
You have not met the minimum length for this assignment.
Review essay structure, including conclusion writing.
Review the personal statement guides.
Your objective is to make yourself stand out. Thus, I urged all students to complete the

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worksheets in the DePaul personal statement guide in order to help generate ideas before you began
outlining and drafting this assignment. Brainstorm. Outline carefully and in detail.
Work on clear, concise phrasing that is not too informal or too conversational.
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