Write a story about a character OR write a personal account.

Begin your story or personal account with the title: The Competition

In your writing:

 describe the events that happened leading up to the competition as well as what happened after
 describe the thoughts and feelings of the people involved
 discuss the challenges faced
 include some reflections on the overall experience

Write approximately 250-300 words. You are advised to spend about 5-10 minutes planning and 50 minutes writing,
editing and proof reading.

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The Competition Comment [MB1]: To think about
something deeply
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1. Contemplate for merely a few seconds about the most exhilarating emotion and ecstatic section. Even though I have only
briefly mentioned anything about
feeling one can experience and then multiply it ten-fold. Such is the feeling one experiences football or competition, I have used
a “story hook” to grab the reader’s
when he his face-to-face with the goalkeeper of the opposition and needing to score. It does attention. I have created an
not require one to understand much about football to understand my following personal atmosphere by using descriptive
vocabulary.
account. It only requires one to possess a sense of struggle and achievement. Comment [MB3]: Non-defining
relative clause

2. In my childhood, when I had a passion and love for football, I had joined the Melbourne Comment [MB4]: Semi Colon: Used
between two closely related
Rovers in the Victoria State Metropolitan League; the main tier football competition in independent clauses

2015. Eager to impress my coach and attain a significant position in the squad, I ran Comment [MB5]: Eagerly,
attentively
diligently around the football pitch, played on even when out of breath, and ran to every Comment [MB6]: Putting the last
ball without stop throughout our training sessions. Impressed with my performance, the comma before “and” in a list is
optional.
coach had assigned me as the main striker and I was fortunate to have played all 20 Comment [MB7]: It is fine to use
games throughout that season. multiple tenses in a text as long as it
is logical and suitable for the
sequence of events.
3. With a strong squad and great guidance our team won most games. We eventually made Comment [MB8]: This is the
Introduction. I have introduced the
it to the league final to face our arch rivals “Broadmeadows Stars”. With the winners of character (myself), and built up and
this match to be considered competition winners and take the trophy home, I was developed the plot
Comment [MB9]: This is the
determined to give it all my best and return to school with my head held high; and even “Problem” section where I allow the
perhaps win the respect of those who had occasionally bullied me at school. readers to know what the main
problem or incident is. In this story, it
is winning the league final

4. As the match went on, Broadmeadows Stars were the more dominant team; yet it was all Comment [MB10]: Section 4 is the
resolution. I discuss how the problem
level. Eventually, my chance had come. Having received a cross from midfield, I was left is being resolved.

one on one with the keeper. I swirled passed him and scored the vital goal. Fate was with Comment [MB11]: There is still some
action in the “resolution” section to
us that day as we became victorious and held the trophy. keep the readers interest.
Comment [MB12]: This is the climax
of the story.
5. The greatest achievement of that day however was not the lifting of the trophy. When I Comment [MB13]: This is the
returned to school the week later, I was cheered on by my fellow classmates. I had earned conclusion section. This is where you
try and link the ending to the
beginning
 the respect of all and was considered an equal to those who had bullied me before. The
“Competition” was an important physical and mental challenge for me. Fortunately, I
came out as the winner. Comment [MB14]: I have
concluded the story with an “idea”.
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