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Objectives
Write a factual report on a native Australian animal that includes at least seven facts.
Use 3 factual adjectives found in research to create a report about a native Australian
animal.
Write a report using the correct informative tone of voice, without giving an opinion, on a
native Australian animal.
English Year 4
Language – Language for Interaction
Understand differences between the language of opinion and feeling and the language of
factual reporting or recording (ACELA1489).
English Year 4
Language – Expressing and Developing Ideas
Incorporate new vocabulary from a range of sources into students’ own texts including
vocabulary encountered in research (ACELA1498)
WORK SAMPLE ANNOTATIONS
English Year 4
Language – Language for Interaction
Understand differences between the language of opinion and feeling and the language of factual reporting or recording (ACELA1489).
English Year 4
Language – Expressing and Developing Ideas
Incorporate new vocabulary from a range of sources into students’ own texts including vocabulary encountered in research (ACELA1498)
The teacher will provide the student with written feedback on the physical report, as well as on the
checklist used to assess the piece of writing. In the comments on the checklist I used the Effective
Where am I going?
Charlie produced a satisfactory report. The facts presented were interesting and covered a range of
areas.
How am I going?
Charlie covered most areas, however they didn’t include habitat and predators which are both key
attributes to animal report writing that was discussed with the class prior to commencing the piece of
writing.
Where to next?
However, for a higher grade in animal report writing, Charlie should aim to write one fact about each
of the following - habitat, diet, appearance, distribution, behaviours, predators and weight.
As this was a satisfactory piece of work I would not schedule a conference with the parent. However,
if a student produced a limited level of work I would ask to discuss their feedback.
Blackmore puts a heavy weight on the role of feedback in assessment and in the learning environment
(Brady & Kennedy, 2012). I attempted to give my student has much constructive feedback as possible,
whilst still following the effective feedback model of feed up, feed back and feed forward.
Cognitive Commentary
Brady and Kennedy (2012) believe that providing feedback helps students improve their learning and
therefore needs to be conducted after assessments. ‘Assessment for learning’ is a great philosophy to
keep in mind when conducting assessment and feedback as it provides the context for what to teach
next and how to teach it. Teachers need to provide feedback to their students so they are held
accountable for their own learning and continue to flourish into lifelong 21st century learners and
thinkers. By providing feedback, teachers are scaffolding this notion and prompting students to have
more success. By providing feedback, teachers are also establishing classrooms that reflect concern –
concern for learning, progress and the individual students (Brady & Kennedy, 2012). This all prompts
further development of metacognitive thinking as students are able to contemplate their thinking
assessment is fit for purpose and created solely for this unit of work. It follows the checklist strategy
outlined in Brady and Kennedy (2012) on page 61. It includes the objective being assessed, if it was
met or not, a grade for the objective and room for comments. The assessment was valid as it answered
For this task I wanted students to be able to write a report using new language found in their
Yes. The assessment task was the report and was measured against a checklist. The report proved
that students were able to write a report using factual adjectives found in their research, 8 facts
acknowledge where the learning needed to improve. This allows for ‘assessment for learning’ (Brady
& Kennedy, 2012) as from this assessment task the teacher can establish what to teach next and where
Based on the curriculum and the work sample I created three objectives. I believe the work
sample is satisfactory or a C grade. They included 8 facts in their writing, included three factual
adjectives and used a bias free tone of voice. The facts were interesting, however they did not cover
all the necessary points - habitat, diet, appearance, distribution, behaviours, predators and weight.
Distribution, diet, appearance, behaviours and weight were covered which was great, however if they
had covered all points the grade would have been higher. The student also included three factual
adjectives, which they found in the research. This was the minimum for a satisfactory grade. The
student used an unbiased tone of voice which was great, however their language was quite informal.
Prior to completing the moderation I believed the work sample was of a C grade and I based
my objectives on this piece of work being satisfactory as I believe Echidnas should be the base level of
a what a year four student can achieve. The moderation was interesting as my partner and I disagreed
on what the grade rewarded should be. I believed the work was satisfactory, awarding a C grade and
my partner believed the work was high, awarding a B grade. We agreed to disagree because our
objectives both measured different achievements. My objectives were based on SCSA ACELA1489 and
ACELA1498, which related to the tone report writing upholds and using new language found in
research. My partner’s objectives were based on the reporting writing process. Therefore, we were
measuring different components of the work sample. I am happy with my grade because according to
my objectives the student did a satisfactory piece of work. They included the correct number of facts,
used the minimum number of factual adjectives found in their research and used an unbiased tone of
voice. These three key facts attributed to my grade of satisfactory. This moderation task taught me
that it is okay to disagree but there needs to be strong evidence to back up both sides. From this
moderation my next step would be to work with Joseph to create objectives for our next task and
moderate again. Moderation is a key component of ensuring assessment is fair as if my student was
in his class they would have received a higher grade and ultimately that is not fair. Therefore, I would
propose a plan to work together on the next task so students were assessed the same across both
classes.