Effective communicators understand that the first draft is rarely as tight, clear, and compelling as it should be. The following are examples of how to evaluate and improve the first draft of a message: 1) Evaluate your Content, Organization, Style, and Tone 2) Evaluating, Editing, and Revising the work of others 1) Revising Your Message: Evaluating the First Draft 1) Evaluate your Content, Organization, Style, and Tone: To evaluate the content of your message, answer the following questions: 1) Is the information accurate? 2) Is the information relevant to the audience? 3) Is there enough information to satisfy the reader’s needs? 4) Is there a good balance between general information (giving readers enough background information to appreciate the message) and specific information (giving readers the details they need to understand the message)? 1) Revising Your Message: Evaluating the First Draft When are you are happy with the content of the your message, review it’s organization by answering the following questions: 1) Are all the points presented in the most logical manner? 2) Do the most important ideas receive the most space, and are they positioned in the most noticeable positions? 3) Would the message be more persuasive if it was organized in a different sequence? 4) Are any points unnecessarily repeated? 5) Are the details connected in a logical manner, or are they spread out through the document? 1) Revising Your Message: Evaluating the First Draft Next, think about whether you achieved the right tone for your audience. Is your writing formal enough to satisfy your audience’s expectations without being too formal or academic? Is your writing too casual for a serious subject? 1) Revising Your Message: Evaluating the First Draft 2) Evaluating, Editing, and Revising the Work of Others: Before you evaluate, edit, and revise some else’s work, you must understand the dual responsibility this task involves. First, unless you have been specifically asked to rewrite something in your own style or change the focus of message, do not do that. Never impose your writing style or pursue your own agenda on someone else’s message without permission. 1) Revising Your Message: Evaluating the First Draft Second, make certain that you understand the writer’s intent before you start suggesting or making changes. 2) Revising to Improve Readability There are four methods that will make your message easier to read and easier to skim: 1) Varying your Sentence Length 2) Keeping your Paragraph Short 3) Using Lists to Clarify and Emphasize 4) Adding Headings and Subheadings 2) Revising to Improve Readability 1) Varying your Sentence Length: By choosing words and sentence structure carefully, you can: Develop a rhythm that highlights important points Brighten up your writing style Make information more interesting to your audience Each sentence length has its advantages. For example: Short sentences can be processed faster and is easier for nonnative speakers and translators to interpret. 2) Revising to Improve Readability Medium-length sentences are good for showing the relationships among ideas. Long sentences are usually the most effective way to explain complex ideas, listing related points, or summarizing or previewing information. Each sentence length also has its disadvantages. Too many short sentences in a row could make your writing choppy. 2) Revising to Improve Readability Medium sentences may not have the impact of short sentences and the informative power of longer sentences. Long sentences may be difficult to understand because they contain a great deal of information and have complex structures. 2) Revising to Improve Readability 2) Keeping your Paragraph Short: Break up your thoughts so that you do not end up with very long paragraphs that will intimidate even the best readers. Shorter paragraphs who usually contain 100 words or less are easier to read than long paragraphs and they make your writing look more inviting to your audience. You can also highlight ideas more effectively by isolating them in short, forceful paragraphs. 2) Revising to Improve Readability 3) Using Lists to Clarify and Emphasize: A very effective substitute to traditional sentences is to place important ideas in a list. A list is a series of words, names, or other items. Lists can: Show the sequence in your ideas Increase their impact visually Enhance the chance that a reader will find key points. Example of Narrative vs. List Narrative List Owning your own business has Owning you own business has many potential advantages. three advantages: One is the opportunity to Opportunity to pursue pursue your own personal personal passion passion. Another advantage is the satisfaction of working for Satisfaction of working for yourself. yourself As a sole proprietor, you also Financial privacy have the advantage of privacy because you do not have to reveal your financial information or plans to anyone. 2) Revising to Improve Readability The items in a list should be parallel which means that they should all use the same grammatical pattern. Example of nonparallel list items: Wrong approach Improve our bottom line Identification of new foreign markets for our products Global market strategies Issues regarding pricing and packaging size 2) Revising to Improve Readability Example of parallel list items: Right approach Improving our bottom line Identifying new foreign markets for our products Developing our global market strategies Resolving pricing and packaging issues Parallel forms are easier to read and skim 2) Revising to Improve Readability 4) Adding Headings and Subheadings: A heading is a brief title that informs readers about the content of the section that follows. Subheading are subordinate to headings, showing subsections with a major section. Heading and subheadings serves the following important functions: Organization Attention Connection 3) Editing for Clarity and Conciseness
After you reviewed and revised your message, the
next step is to make certain you message is clear and concise. You can make sure that your message is clear and concise by doing the following: 1) Edit for Clarity 2) Edit for Conciseness 3) Editing for Clarity and Conciseness
1) Edit for Clarity:
The following are steps that you can take to make sure that your message is coherent and intelligible: 1) Break up overly long sentences: If you have too many long sentences in your message, you are probably attempting to make the sentence do more than it can reasonably do such as: Expressing two dissimilar thoughts Providing the reader with too many pieces of supporting evidence at once. 3) Editing for Clarity and Conciseness
2) Rewrite hedging sentences: Hedging means
retreating for making a confident statement about the topic. 3) Impose parallelism: When you have two or more similar ideas, make them parallel by using the same grammatical pattern. 4) Clarify sentence structure: Keep the subject and predicate of a sentence as close together as you can. When the subject and predicate are far apart, your audience may need to read the sentence twice to understand who did what. Revising for Clarity 3) Editing for Clarity and Conciseness
2) Edit for Conciseness: Many of the modifications
that you make to enhance clarity will also make your message shorter. Next you need to examine the text with the goal of decreasing the number of words. The following are some advice on how decrease the number of words in your message and increase the efficiency of your message: 1) Delete unnecessary words: To determine if a word or phrase is essential, try the sentence without it. Revising for Conciseness / Unnecessary Words and Phrases 3) Editing for Clarity and Conciseness
2) Shorten long words and phrases: Short words
and phrases are usually more vivid and easier to read than long words and phrases. 3) Eliminate redundancies: In some word combinations, the word say the same thing. Example: “visible to the eye” is redundant because visible is enough without having to add “to the eye.” Revising for Conciseness / Long Words or Phrases Revising for Conciseness / Redundancies 3) Editing for Clarity and Conciseness
4) Rewrite “It is/There are” starters: If you begin a
sentence with an indefinite pronoun such as it or there, there is a good chance that you can shorten the sentence and make it more effective. Example: “We believe….” is a stronger opening than “It is believed that….” because it is shorter and it identifies who is doing the believing. 4) Producing Your Message It is now time for you to put your hard work on display. The production quality of your message which includes: The total effect of page or screen design Graphical elements Typography The production quality plays a critical role in the effectiveness of your message. 4) Producing Your Message The following are some principles to effectively design your message: 1) Designing for Readability 2) Formatting Formal Letters and Memos 3) Designing Messages for Mobile Devices 4) Producing Your Message 1) Designing for Readability: Design impacts readability in two ways: 1) Design elements can enhance the effectiveness of your message. 2) Visual design sends a nonverbal message to your readers, affecting their perceptions of the communication before they read a single word. 4) Producing Your Message To ensure effective design, pay attention to the following design elements: 1) Consistency: Be consistent in the use of margin, typeface, type size, and space. Also be consistent with your vertical lines, columns and borders. 2) Balance: Like the tone of your language, visual balance can be too formal, just right, or too informal for your specific message. 4) Producing Your Message 3) Restraint: Always try to simplify the design of your message. 4) Detail: Make sure to pay attention to the details that will impact your design and therefore your message. For example: very wide columns of text can be difficult to read. It makes sense to split the text into two narrower columns. 4) Producing Your Message You can make your printed and electronic messages more effective by understanding the following: 1) White Space: Any space that does not contain text or artwork, both in print and online is called white space. To increase the probability that your audience will read you message, be generous with the white space. Example of White Space 4) Producing Your Message 2) Margins and Justifications: Margins define the space around text and between columns. Margins can be justified (which means they are flush, or aligned vertically, on both the left and right), Flush left with ragged right margin, flush-right with ragged-left margin, or centered. 4) Producing Your Message 3) Typefaces: refers to the physical design of letters, numbers, and other text characters. Typefaces impacts the tone of your message, making it look more authoritative, friendly, businesslike, casual, classic, or modern. 4) Type Styles: refers to any modifications that offers contrast or focus to type including boldface, italic, underlining, color, and others. Examples of Typefaces 4) Producing Your Message 2) Formatting Formal Letters and Memos: Formal business letters often follow specific design methods. Most business letters are printed on letterhead stationary which includes the company’s name, address, and other contact information. The first element that appears after the letterhead is the date and the that is followed by the inside address which identifies the person receiving the letter. 4) Producing Your Message The next element that appears is the salutation, often in the form of Dear, Mr. or Ms. Last Name. The message comes next and then is followed by the complimentary close, such as Sincerely, Best Regards, or Cordially. The last element is the signature block, space for the signature, followed by the sender’s printed name and title. Example of Formal Business Letter 4) Producing Your Message 3) Designing Messages for Mobile Devices: The following are tips to format the content for mobile device: 1) Think in small chunks 2) Make generous use of white space 3) Format simply 4) Consider horizontal and vertical layouts 5) Proofreading Your Message Proofreading refers to the quality inspection stage for your document. It is last chance to make certain that your document is ready to convey your message and your reputation to your audience. Look for the following types of mistake during proofreading: 1) Unseen mistakes from the writing, design, and layout stages 2) Mistakes that occurred during the production. 5) Proofreading Your Message The following techniques will help you become a professional at proofreading and ensure high- quality output: 1) Make multiple passes: Go through your document several times, focusing on different elements each time. 2) Use perceptual tricks: To keep your brain from tricking you, you have to trick your brain by changing the way you process the visual information. 5) Proofreading Your Message You can trick your brain by: ❖ Reading each page backward, from the bottom to the top ❖ Putting your finger under each word and reading it silently ❖ Making a tear in a sheet of paper that reveals only one line of type at a time ❖ Reading the document aloud and pronouncing each word very carefully 5) Proofreading Your Message 3) Double-check high-priority items: Double-check the spelling of names, and the accuracy of dates, addresses, and any number that may cause problems if incorrect. 4) Give yourself some distance: Do not proofread immediately after you have finished a document. 5) Be vigilant: Do not read a large amount of material in one sitting and do not proofread when you are tired. 5) Proofreading Your Message 6) Stay Focused: Concentrate on what you are doing. Try to block out distractions and focus on proofreading. 7) Review complex electronic documents on paper: Some people have a difficult time proofreading webpages, online reports, and other electronic documents on-screen. Try to print the materials so that you can proofread them on paper. 8) Take your time 6) Distributing Your Message When distributing your message consider the following factors: 1) Cost: Cost may be an issue for lengthy reports or multimedia productions. Be sure to consider the nonverbal message you are sending regarding cost. For example: Overnight delivery of a printed report could make you look responsive in one situation and wasteful in another situation. 2) Convenience: How much work is involved for you and your audience. For example: if you a file-compression utility to shrink the size of email attachments, make certain that you receivers have the technology to expand the files 6) Distributing Your Message 3) Time: How soon does your message need to reach your receivers? For example: Do not waste money on overnight delivery if the receiver is not going to read the report for a week. Also, do not mark a message, printed or electronic as “urgent” if they are not. 4) Security and privacy: Always weigh the convenience that is offered by electronic communication against security and privacy issues.