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Flabby expressions: dài dòng, chứa các từ sáo mòn, được sử dụng quá mức mà không mang lại
ý nghĩa gì, những từ cần được thay thế ngắn gọn hơn.
at this point in time -> now
due to the fact that -> because
in very few cases -> seldom
despite the fact that -> although
in the near future -> soon
Long lead-ins with unnecessary introductory words: lời giới thiệu dài dòng
This is to let you know that Monday is a holiday. -> Monday is a holiday.
I am sending this e-mail to announce that our internal audit begins on January 5. -> Our internal
audit begins on January 5.
Redundancy: repeat meaning, hai từ nghĩa giống nhau dặt cạnh nhau, combine= together,
combine together is like combine combine
combined together -> combined
exact and same -> exact or same
my personal opinion -> my opinion
Part 1
1. Every effort will be made to serve the long list of order from our customers
around Europe.
Dangling modifier
We will made effort to serve the long list of order from our customers
2. The CEO will refer back to the budget in the meeting today.
Redundancy
The CEO will refer to the budget in the meeting today
3. In the normal course of a product launch, giving free samples is a very useful
way to familiarize customers with a new product.
Excessive exuberance+ Empty word
Giving free samples is a useful way to familiarize customers with a new
product
4. Those who accept bribery from corporations will be given an immediate official
dismissal.
Buried verbs
Those who accept bribery from corporations will be dismissed immediately
5. Some meeting agendas mispell the word “calender’.
Spelling errors
Some meeting agendas misspell ‘calendar’
6. Pyxl has offices in Knoxville and Nashville. They are a full-service digital
marketing agency.
Grammatical error
Pyxl has offices in Knoxville and Nashville. It is a full-service digital
marketing agency
7. I ensure you that Pyxl will complete your project on time.
Confusing word choice
I assure you that Pyxl will complete your project on time
8. All southwest airlines passengers will exit the Plane at gate 14 when they reach
Ontario international airport.
There are 5 mistakes in the following message. Identify them. Rewrite the message
correctly.
Weaknesses
- Fails to double space between paragraph
- Fails to conclude with an action, date and time
- Fails to use numbered list to increase readability
- Cliché endings
- False structure of question
Can the devices be easily removed when we need to move equipment around
Answer to these questions and any other information you can provide will help us.
Your response before October 15 would be most appreciated since our planning
meets October 20.
Sincerely,
We know that you expect to receive reimbursement for the loss. That’s why we’re
writing personally about your request.
To receive this coupon, please call 809-666-3444. We are hopeful that in the
future, we will be able to have you as our passenger.
Sincerely,
Jeremy Harper, a blogger and Web conferencing expert, responds to a request from
Christina Cruz, who wants advice for an article she is writing. His advice is good,
but his message is poorly organized, contains grammar and other errors, and is
hard to read.
YOUR TASK Analyze the following message and note five weaknesses with
examples. Then revise if your instructor advises. Remember that you can download
these documents at www.cengagebrain.com.
2.Identify yourself. State your name the first few times you speak.
3.Mute (turn off) your phone. Because participants can hear your sound in the
background, you should mute your microphone.
4.Play with your microphone and speakers until you sound good. Don’t shuffle
papers. Don’t eat. Don’t move things while you are speaking.
5. Use a lobby slide to open. This slide tells the meeting details such as the start
time, audio information, and the agenda. This lobby slide should go up about 10 to
15 minutes before the meeting begins.
If you have any question, call or write to me at this email. Following procedure
helps you to prepare for the article.
Sincerely,
Jeremy Harper