Text A
Pull quotes from the text and apply a lesson for how this student is performing in each rubric
category. Score the example per category on the right.
Quote
Category A “The text appreciates yet
challenges orthodox ways of
timekeeping and carefully
integrates its cultural values.”
Category B “Highlighting the fact that time
is beyond a “British, it is
woven into the cultural fabric of
everyday life” shows the value
time holds in their daily life.”
Category C “It effectively uses a formal yet
comprehensive and
enthusiastic tone to spark
interest among science
enthusiasts globally.”
Category D “This effect is further
heightened by using hyperbole
in ‘millions of people still
paid…’”
Text B
Pull quotes from the text and apply a lesson for how this student is performing in each rubric
category. Score the example per category on the right.
Quote
Category A “The online advertisement
from 2014 from lifewear brand
Uniqlo is taking a positive step
in making the world a better
place by encouraging
audiences to actively commit
good actions to benefit their
surrounding in return for a
reward”
What it shows Score
This shows that the author 3
understands what the article is
talking about, mentioning the focus
on cultural significance and
technological improvements
highlighted within the text.
The author uses clear examples 3
from the text that support their
interpretation of the text stated in
their thesis. However, their focus
becomes repetitive and they could
have benefited by focusing on more
varied subjects.
The pacing and structure was easy 3
to follow and coherent. They stayed
on topic, but at times the sentences
seemed confusing because of
placement and grammar.
The author used a good amount of 3
literary devices and aspects, but
sometimes it seemed misused or
like they could’ve used a vocabulary
word to represent what they were
talking about.
What it shows Score
The author shows a thorough 4
understanding of where the ad is
from and what message it is trying to
push to the general public. The
author is very concise and shows
their understanding of aspects that
ads usually have to be successful.
 Category B “Firstly the title, which is a
large, bold, and capitalized red
font makes a striking
appearance to the eye.”
The author clearly relates their 5
analysis to the leading question,
regularly referencing examples
within the ad and explaining the
impact it has on the viewer.

Category C “Ultimately, it can be safely The structure of paragraphs and 4

said that Uniqlo has focus within the paragraphs were all
successfully taken advantage well done. There were few grammar
of the stylistic features of an or spelling mistakes
advertisement such as layout,
fonts, and visual
representation to effectively
communicate their message
of helping others.”

Category D “The red color also provides
contrast with the smaller texts
which creates a distinct
difference in the
advertisement.”
The author uses concise vocabulary 4
to explain her point. I would only
recommend relating their points with
a few more literary devices.

Examiner score
Text A Score Summarize Examiner Commentary:

Category A 2 1. They showed some understanding, but also was unclear

or didn’t mention major aspects of the text
Category B 2 2. The stylistic analysis was misused and not used at all in
places they should’ve been
Category C 3 3. The organization of an essay is correct, but the
organization of thoughts is confusing or unclear
Category D 3 4. Language used was clear, but not extraordinary

Text B Score Summarize Examiner Commentary:

Category A 4 1. Thorough understanding and responses are relevant to

the question
Category B 4 2. Insightful analysis that stays on point with their argument
3. Focused, well organized, and coherent structure
Category C 4 4. Clear, accurate, and appropriate language with few errors
Category D 4

Write down takeaways from the discussion of the exemplar and how specifically you will apply
this lesson to your own work.
Takeaways from exemplar What I will do

If you bring up a point, make sure to properly I will make sure to add quotes that represent
elaborate with specific examples my argument well

Using a variety of literary devices and make Practice literary devices so I have a variety to
sure to use them properly pull from on the day of the test

Make sure to develop/expand their I will avoid bringing up points I can not
arguments strongly support with examples from the text
or if I don’t have the right vocabulary to
explain it