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Malak Fathy Essay

Elsadek 2
Elsadek 1
Malak Elsadek
Ola Gabr
English Literature
11-21-2022
The Struggle Against Injustice
As seen in 1984, George Orwell employed various techniques to demonstrate
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how the citizens of Oceania were subjected to totalitarian rule. Totalitarianism
is a form of government and a political system that forbids all opposition
parties, criminalizes individual and group opposition to the state and its
claims, and criminalizes all forms of dissent. He wrote this book to enlighten
people about the injustices people face in the real world due to their unjust
society. This book has helped readers understand what it means to live in an
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unjust world, whether it is a fictional or realistic setting, and the struggle in the
unjust world.

George Orwell depicts a sense of injustice, a tortured view of a society where

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political systems suppress individual thoughts and emotions. How he portrays,
this has helped readers understand what it means to live in an unjust world.
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The injustice can be seen throughout the story in multiple ways, firstly in how
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the outer party members lived, which was said in the book, "The hallway smelt
of boiled cabbage and old rag mats. At one end of It, a colored poster, too large
for indoor display, had been tacked to the wall." Ironically, these apartments

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were called victory mansions, which makes no sense since there is nothing
victorious about these apartments. The book states, "Victory Mansions were
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old flats, built in 1930 or thereabouts, and were falling to pieces. The plaster
constantly flaked from ceilings and walls; the pipes burst in every hard frost;
the roof leaked whenever there was snow; the heating system was usually
running at half steam when it was not closed down altogether from motives of
economy." The outer party members later Party the worst conditions due to the
lack of human rights, which their government stripped off them.
Furthermore, the number of laws implemented on the outer Party to control
their every thought and emotion was outrageous; as mentioned in the book, any
thought or anything said or written that goes against the Party was considered
a thought crime. When Ampleforth said, "I allowed the word 'God' to remain at
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the end of a line. I could not help it!'" Ampleforth got imprisoned for writing the
word god, which did not match well with the Party's laws since the only god
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was big brother.

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Moreover, the setting of 1984 which was set in the dystopian sector of Oceania.
Dystopia is a city where humans suffer significantly from poverty and injustice
due to a totalitarian government. George Orwell did a great job of showing how
the city of Oceania is realistic. The usage of propaganda in 1984 helped open
readers' eyes to all the different types of propaganda the reader's society might
be doing. If readers look at a real-life example, they will find North Korea, a
dystopian country that stripped its citizens of their personalities. North Korea's
usage of propaganda helps it to be able to brainwash and control the citizens of
North Korea. North Korea Used Propaganda against their citizens when they
created a fake poster of their national team winning the world cup North Korea
usually releases new propaganda posters for public display a few times per

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year. This is precisely how it was in 1984, and they used the telescreens during
the two minutes hate to show how their military was winning against their
enemies.

Furthermore, George Orwell showed the struggle of living in an unjust world

through the main character Winston "Winston, who was thirty-nine and had a
varicose ulcer above his right ankle,"; throughout the whole story, we can see
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that Winston suffers from an ulcer which symbolizes his repressed humanity.
The Party also seeks to deprive people of their ability to love. Even in marriages,
the Party robs a couple of their affection and the pleasure of sexual
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intercourse, which can be seen in Winston's relationship with his wife
Katherine, where the sole purpose of having sexual intercourse with each other
is a duty to the Party. "They must, she said, produce a child if they could. So the
performance continued to happen, once a week quite regularly, whenever it was
not impossible. She even reminded him of it in the morning as something that
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must be done that evening and must not be forgotten. She had two names for
it. One was 'making a baby, and the other was 'our duty to the Party (yes, she
had used that phrase)."

In Conclusion, George Orwell wrote this book to raise awareness of the

injustices people face in the real world due to their unjust society, which he
succeeded in doing.1984 made readers more aware of their society. This book
has helped readers understand what it means to live in an unjust world,
whether in a fictional or realistic setting, and the struggle that comes with
living in an unjust world.

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Works Cited
Magazine, Stanford. "An Everyman in a Unique Dystopia." STANFORD Magazine,
stanfordmag.org/contents/an-everyman-in-a-unique-dystopia.
Orwell, George. 1984 George Orwell - Nineteen Eighty-Four - Paperback.
Books&Coffe, 2022.
Wikipedia contributors. "Dystopia." Wikipedia, 23 Oct. 2022,
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Dystopia.
---. "Propaganda in North Korea." Wikipedia, 21 June 2022,
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Propaganda_in_North_Korea.
---. "Totalitarianism." Wikipedia, 16 Nov. 2022,
en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Totalitarianism.

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1. were subjected Passive voice misuse Clarity

2. setting, Comma misuse within clauses Correctness

3. portrays, Punctuation in Correctness

compound/complex
sentences

4. be seen Passive voice misuse Clarity

5. was said Passive voice misuse Clarity

6. and were Wordy sentences Clarity

7. I Inappropriate colloquialisms Delivery

8. the big, or a big Determiner use Correctness

(a/an/the/this, etc.)

9. which Pronoun use Correctness

10. was set Passive voice misuse Clarity

11. Moreover, the setting of 1984 which was Incomplete sentences Delivery
set in the dystopian sector of Oceania.

12. This Intricate text Clarity

13. Furthermore, George Orwell showed the Hard-to-read text Clarity

struggle of living in an unjust world
through the main character Winston
"Winston, who was thirty-nine and had a
varicose ulcer above his right ankle,";
throughout the whole story, we can see
that Winston suffers from an ulcer which
symbolizes his repressed hum…

14. be seen Passive voice misuse Clarity

15. be forgotten Passive voice misuse Clarity

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