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专 业 ( 领
研究生姓名 Name 学 号 StudenT ID Major
域)
指导教师姓名 Tutor’s name 培养单位 经济学院
论文题目 Thesis title
请对专家评阅意见逐条进行答复(需详细注明论文修改的具体页、行。此
页不够可加页。)
(I II III means three different professors)
(you should state the result of your thesis first like: BBB)
专家
1. Opinion ( blind review) in your system from other university’s
评阅 professor “I”
该文虽然较完整地阐述了主要内容并得出相关结论。但仍存在一些问题和不足有待解决,具体如下: 1.该研
意见 究在第 2 章提出新冠肺炎的相关内容,但未清楚说明其在该研究中发挥的作用,同时缺乏相关的数据说明
其对社交媒体产生的主要影响。建议作者能在该文中进行补充说明; 2.该研究需要注意书写的逻辑性,该文
落实 的摘要未能清楚完整地说明主要的背景、问题、方法、结果与结论等。建议作者能更有逻辑地将摘要书写清
楚,注意逻辑性; 3.该研究多处存在语言表达不流畅的情况,比如中文摘要第三行等。建议作者通读全文加
及修改 以修正; 4.该研究在写作格式上存在多处问题。首先,目录 2.6、3.4-3.5、4.3、5.3 字体有问题;其次,存在
空白页的情况;另外,该文中多处图未居中,且未表明图名及编号;最后,参考文献格式多处存在错误。建
情况 议作者认真检查加以修改。
English Translation
(Impleme Although this article describes the main content and draws relevant
ntation of conclusions more completely. However, there are still some problems and
experts' shortcomings that need to be resolved. The details are as follows: 1. The
comments study put forward the relevant content of new coronary pneumonia in
and thsis Chapter 2, but did not clearly explain its role in the study. At the same
modification) time, there is a lack of relevant data to explain its social impact. The
main influence of the media. It is suggested that the author can make
supplementary explanations in the article; 2. The research needs to pay
attention to the logic of writing, and the abstract of the article fails
to clearly and completely explain the main background, problems, methods,
results and conclusions. It is recommended that the author write the
abstract more logically and pay attention to the logic; 3. There are many
linguistic problems in the study, such as the third line of the Chinese
abstract. It is recommended that the author read through the full text to
make corrections; 4. There are many problems in the writing format of the
study. Firstly, there are problems with the fonts in the catalog 2.6, 3.4-
3.5, 4.3, and 5.3; secondly, there are blank pages; in addition, many
figures in the article are not centered, and the figure name and number
are not indicated; finally, there are many references to the format error.
It is recommended that the author carefully check and modify it.
2. Your response to professor I’ opinions, including how you will revise
your thesis according to his/her opinions (give the exact page of where
you have modified your thesis according to this opinion; copy here the
original content of your thesis and the part you have modified)
I have added the explanation as to why the covid-19 pandemic
is related to the study and how it served as a catalyst for
multiple companies to go digital. I have revised the abstract
to represent all key parts of the study including a summary of
the conclusion. The fonts and format throughout the paper has
also been revised, it cannot be copy here as it would be too
long so please refer to the revised thesis file instead.
2. Old Abstract
The internet economy has been seen rising at an exponential
growth throughout the past years. The fundamental shift on consumer
behavior that is going digital and therefore this shift of consumer
behavior will elicit a response to an organization's overall strategy.
In the context of the internet economy, the research would focus
primarily on social media and its adoption of small and micro
enterprises in Metro Manila Philippines. The nature of the adoption
will vary across different types of organizations (e.g. micro, small,
medium) or the country's nature whether it is developed or developing.
Recognizing that the internet economy is brought about by multiple
facets of technology that spur the growth of the internet economy, the
study will mainly delve into social media platforms and its adoption by
different kinds of organizations. The adoption of social media by
organizations is a relatively new strategy that is not yet thoroughly
explored therefore the researchers would like to find out the data
around the adoption of social media. What are the relevant factors that
influence its adoption and what are the barriers to non-adoption by
those organizations that do not have an online presence. In order to
organize and understand data on the reason for adoption better, the
study will employ a TOE (technological, organizational, environmental)-
based model that lets respondents rank the level of importance of each
factor based on the respective perspective. The study shows how
organizations are starting to shift their strategies to going digital
given that consumer behavior has started to shift to digital as well.
Given the relevancy of the coronavirus epidemic and how the Philippines
epidemic cases continue to grow, organizations will have to adapt to
the new change as retail stores are closing. Thus, this study will help
the audience understand the importance of adopting an online presence
like social media to cater to the emergence of a digital economy.
Modified Abstract
3. Opinion ( blind review) in your system from other uni’s professor “II”
但文章存在下述问题: 1. 文章英文摘要撰写的规范性欠佳,需分段落
且逻辑清晰。 2. 中文摘要语句不够通顺,需要重新修改。例如:“研究
将主要集中在菲律宾马尼拉大都会的社交媒体及其对小型和微企业采
用。收养性质将因不同类型的组织(例如,微小中)或国家而有所无论
它是发达的还展中”。“影响其采用相关因素有哪些,没在线业务组织
不该障碍是什么?为了更好地组织和理解采用原因的数据,该研究将基
于 TOE (技术,组织环 境)的模型,该可让受访者根据各自观点对每
个因素重要性等级进行排名。”这些表述都不符合中文习惯。 3. 篇章结
构不太合理,第一章太长,占据三分之一篇幅建议压缩。 4. 文献综述
薄弱,第二章中的许多数据都不是文献综述而是现实背景,2.6-2.8 更
倾向于背景描述而不是文献综述。
English Translation
However, the article has the following problems: 1. The
English abstract of the article is not well standardized and
needs to be divided into paragraphs and logically clear. 2.
The Chinese abstract sentence is not fluent and needs to be
revised. For example: "The research will mainly focus on
social media in Metro Manila, Philippines and its adoption by
small and micro businesses. The nature of adoption will vary
depending on the type of organization (for example, micro-
medium) or country, whether it is developed or developed. in".
"What are the factors that affect their adoption? What are the
obstacles that organizations should not have online business?
In order to better organize and understand the data on the
reasons for adoption, the research will be based on the TOE
(Technology, Organizational Environment) model. The authors
ranked the importance of each factor according to their own
opinions.” These expressions do not conform to Chinese
habits. 3. The structure of the chapter is unreasonable. The
first chapter is too long. It is recommended to compress it if
it occupies one third of the space. 4. The literature review
is weak. Many of the data in Chapter 2 are not literature
reviews but realistic backgrounds. 2.6-2.8 are more inclined
to background descriptions than literature reviews.
4. Your response to professor II’ opinions, including how you will revise
your thesis according to his/her opinions (give the exact page of where
you have modified your thesis according to this opinion; copy here the
original content of your thesis and the part you have modified)
I agree with this professor’s opinion and revised my thesis accordingly.
Please refer to my revised thesis file to view it better. I have revised the
abstract and made it more logical in accordance with the paper. I have also
shortened the introduction and moved the information to the related literature
as it is more appropriate there. I added more data on the literature review to
strengthen the section and give more information on social media and its
classifications.
1. Old Abstract
The internet economy has been seen rising at an exponential
growth throughout the past years. The fundamental shift on consumer
behavior that is going digital and therefore this shift of consumer
behavior will elicit a response to an organization's overall strategy.
In the context of the internet economy, the research would focus
primarily on social media and its adoption of small and micro
enterprises in Metro Manila Philippines. The nature of the adoption
will vary across different types of organizations (e.g. micro, small,
medium) or the country's nature whether it is developed or developing.
Recognizing that the internet economy is brought about by multiple
facets of technology that spur the growth of the internet economy, the
study will mainly delve into social media platforms and its adoption by
different kinds of organizations. The adoption of social media by
organizations is a relatively new strategy that is not yet thoroughly
explored therefore the researchers would like to find out the data
around the adoption of social media. What are the relevant factors that
influence its adoption and what are the barriers to non-adoption by
those organizations that do not have an online presence. In order to
organize and understand data on the reason for adoption better, the
study will employ a TOE (technological, organizational, environmental)-
based model that lets respondents rank the level of importance of each
factor based on the respective perspective. The study shows how
organizations are starting to shift their strategies to going digital
given that consumer behavior has started to shift to digital as well.
Given the relevancy of the coronavirus epidemic and how the Philippines
epidemic cases continue to grow, organizations will have to adapt to
the new change as retail stores are closing. Thus, this study will help
the audience understand the importance of adopting an online presence
like social media to cater to the emergence of a digital economy.
New Abstract
The internet economy has been seen rising at an exponential
growth throughout the past years. The fundamental shift on consumer
behavior that is going digital and therefore this shift of consumer
behavior will elicit a response to an organization's overall
strategy. In the context of the internet economy, the research would
focus primarily on social media and its adoption of small and micro
enterprises in Metro Manila Philippines. The nature of the adoption
will vary across different types of organizations (e.g. micro,
small, medium) or the country's nature whether it is developed or
developing. Recognizing that the internet economy is brought about
by multiple facets of technology that spur the growth of the
internet economy, the study will mainly delve into social media
platforms and its adoption by different kinds of organizations.
The adoption of social media by organizations is a relatively
new strategy that is not yet thoroughly explored therefore the
researchers would like to find out the data and statistics around
the adoption of social media. This opportunity will only be realized
by SMEs if, and when, social media are adopted in their
organizations. This therefore creates a requirement to understand
the factors that influence SMEs in making the adoption decision. The
research related to such factors is scarce, not least because the
technologies are relatively new. This opportunity will only be
realized by MSMEs if, and when, social media are adopted in their
organizations. This therefore creates a requirement to understand
the factors that influence SMEs in making the adoption decision. The
research related to such factors is scarce, not least because the
technologies are relatively new such as data with regards to the
relevant factors that influence its adoption and what are the
barriers to non-adoption by those organizations that do not have an
online presence.
The study will employ a deductive research approach where
both qualitative and quantitative approaches were combined to meet
the research objectives. A survey was conducted involving 100 MSMEs
in Metro Manila, the capital city of the Philippines to examine the
demographic information of the respondents, their enterprise
information, and the reason of their social media adoption and non-
adoption. The study also employed a TOE (technological,
organizational, environmental)-based model that lets respondents
rank the level of importance of each set of factors based on the
respective perspective.
The survey data was analyzed through the cross – tabulation
of data gathered from the survey. Based from the descriptive
analysis, it has been shown that two-thirds of the MSMEs in Metro
Manila adopts at least one social media platform and the main reason
they adopt at least one social media platform is for advertising and
promotions, which is in line with results from the TOE-model which
showed that in the technological context, the variable: reach is the
most important reason on the adoption of social media. The resulting
research model proposed in this thesis can improve these
stakeholders’ understandings of why some SMEs have chosen to adopt
social media technologies, while other SMEs which face similar
market conditions have not.
Chapter 3: Methodology.
The chapter introduces the methodology approach and the steps
for conducting the research. The author explains which method is used
in the thesis and why it is chosen over the others research methods
from the literature. Attention is put on the different data collection
techniques used. Secondary and primary data are described and the
reason why they are used is given. It will also introduce the
conceptual framework discussed earlier in conjunction with SMEs
literature to examine the characteristic determinants of Social Media
adoption in the Philippine SMEs and the effect of this adoption over
business development efforts of these SMEs.
Chapter 1: Introduction.
The chapter will introduce he background of the study of the
research and the objective of the study in which the author is planning
to accomplish. It will include all the background information on the
research and research objectives in order for the readers to understand
what the author’s scope is and what is his/her objectives.
Chapter 3: Methodology.
The chapter introduces the methodology approach and the steps
for conducting the research. The author explains which method is used
in the thesis and why it is chosen over the others research methods
from the literature. Attention is put on the different data collection
techniques used. Secondary and primary data are described and the
reason why they are used is given. It will also introduce the
conceptual framework discussed earlier in conjunction with SMEs
literature to examine the characteristic determinants of Social Media
adoption in the Philippine SMEs and the effect of this adoption over
business development efforts of these SMEs.
2.2 E-commerce
fast-moving consumer goods. New methods for companies will evolve and
center around getting digital as they adjust to the new normal.
2 Literature Review
Since our study will be focused on MSMEs, it is important to
define what constitutes an MSME. The researchers would also define what
is considered to constitute an MSME in Philippines and the internet
economy of the Philippines on how well its performing in the Southeast
Asia region. In that regard, the researchers would like to identify the
most common features of MSMEs and, more specifically, the particular
features that distinguish them from large organizations as well.
This section aims to analyze the associated literature which
discusses social media and just how the world today is beginning to
trend towards going digital in consumer behavior. As the social media
capital of the planet, understanding various views of social media
helps people understand just how relevant and crucial social media is
in the e - commerce setup of the Philippines.
In this particular part, literature regarding social media are
going to be address from various perspectives to be able to offer
readers a background on just how social media functions on businesses
and aid people in gaining a deeper knowledge of it. Different platforms
of social media will be discussed and the main platforms which are
dominating in engaging consumers. The part will even delve into the
pros and cons of social media within the participation of a business
and the social media profile of the Philippines in relation to its
MSMEs.
2.3.1.1 Facebook
2.3.1.2 Twitter
2.3.1.3 Instagram
2.3.1.4 LinkedIn
2.4 E-commerce
One will find much more than 350 million online users in
Southeast Asia and ninety % are online users from the smartphones of
theirs. The chance for social commerce is great, particularly in the
Philippines where social networking penetration will be the highest if
not among the planets. By 2025, it's anticipated that the e-commerce
industry is going to exceed US1dolar1 100bn per annum. A survey
conducted by Econsultancy (2019) suggested that respondents to the
survey reported spending considerable sums on the internet, with around
29% spending far more than $100 monthly on internet purchases. The
buying decisions of theirs is greatly influenced by the info they find
out on social media. Nearly 60% of the people in the survey declared a
quarter of online shopping is affected by social media. The two hottest
routes which triggered a purchase are Facebook which is 78 % and
Youtube which is 52%. With, 44% of the customers suggested that they've
created more than three internet purchases in history month as an
outcome of seeing social media ads and content online. Also, resulting
in them after purchase, 82% of customers share their purchases via
social media platforms thus amplifying the effect and also producing
publicity for that brand. This demonstrates each internet shopping
experience could be social. Econsultancy (2019) mentioned that
entrepreneurs that are working hard in internet retail are already
experiencing the advantages as users go online making purchases.
Seventy percent of marketers found that they currently have seen a rise
from online retail and over 90% of them agreed that social commerce
becomes more and more essential in the upcoming years as social media
will proceed driving revenue forward. It's anticipated that most e-
commerce merchants will allocate a budget in the social media part of
their company and also maximize social media applications like social
media advertisements to be able to get sales up.
Bain & Company and Google (2016) partnered up to survey over
6000 consumers in Singapore, Indonesia, Malaysia, Thailand, Vietnam,
and the Philippines to discuss the landscape of e-commerce. In the
report of theirs, a characteristic that sets Southeast Asians apart
from internet consumers in other markets is the fact that e-customers
in this particular area pick from multiple websites as observed in
Figure six. It may be found that Southeast Asia's Consumers do not show
some preference or loyalty to these retail platforms. Social media
despite not remaining in the dominating list of preferred platforms as
observed in Figure six is very important in conditions on driving
product sales to these e-commerce platforms. Among digital customers,
more than 80% use social media options such as the famous photo-sharing
website Instagram or perhaps messaging apps including Facebook's
messenger to investigate products or perhaps usually link with sellers.
As outlined earlier, social media functions as a store for e-commerce
sites which allows business entities to make use of social networking
as a means to affect customers and also enables customers to discover
the item or maybe system before committing to buy in the e-commerce
site. Institutions are beginning to quickly grow the services of theirs
to social commerce to entice customers. It is already at the stage
where sales that lead from social media comprise up to 30% of the
amount of all transactions. A typical scenario: A customer considering
purchasing something links with a seller on Facebook, agrees investing
and after that arranges for delivery and payment on a peer-to-peer
basis. There is a session in the comment from one Thai consumer: "I
purchased the tea of mine on social media since it is a small batch
production and I enjoyed conversing with the seller. If I'd noticed
similar product or service on an e-commerce site, I would not have
bought it " (Hoppe, 2016)
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否同意参加答辩)
Students’ tutors’ advice about whether the students revise the thesis
according to the professor ABC’s opinions, and does the tutor agree the
student to take part in the defense or not
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指导
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