W131 ML Revision Memo

Name: Eric Lee

Reviewers: Vinh Pham

Summary of feedback you received:

1. Good thesis statement
2. Good to have separate summary paragraph
3. Need to write more

Substantive steps you’ll take to revise your paper:

1. I need to start on my body paragraphs.
2. I want to revise if my introduction is irrelevant or unnecessary.
3. Rather than looking for literal technique and structure, I will try to focus more on the differences and
similarities of two essays and how it affected audience to perceive the essay.
4. I want to write a new comparative grid to make sure if I haven’t missed anything