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1. From the comments you received from me on your first essay, list the revisions you need
to complete First of all most of my classmates did not participate and secondly, no one sent
feedback to my essay. However I would follow the guidance to ensure to do the following.
1. Controlling idea that reveals to your classmates how the members of the community use the
genre (remember, this is not simply a definition of the genre—it needs to be specific to the
community)
2. Introduction that hooks readers and narrows your focus in the essay
3. Topic sentences for each paragraph that connect the sub-point of the paragraph to the
controlling idea
4. Evidence from the genre itself in every paragraph with the correct in-text MLA citation
5. Conclusion that summarizes your essay (2 sentences), tells your readers why your analysis is
important (2 sentences), and tells your readers what you want them to do with the information (2
sentences)
6. Omits the use of the pronoun “you”
7. Work Cited page in the correct MLA format
I have not gotten any feedback yet, but I do think that I did learn from my previous mistakes and
have done my best to complete this essay. I do need to have the proper citations for my essay as
well as have the complete word count that is required to finish my essay.
2. Do the same for your second essay
1. Controlling idea that reveals to your classmates how the members of three communities use
the same genre (remember, this is not simply a definition of the genre—it needs to be specific to
the community) in different and similar ways.
2. Introduction that hooks readers and narrows your focus in the essay
3. Topic sentences for each paragraph that connect the sub-point of the paragraph to the
controlling idea
4. Evidence from the communities’ uses of the genre itself in every paragraph with the correct in-
text MLA citation
5. Conclusion that summarizes your essay (2 sentences), tells your readers why your analysis is
important (2 sentences), and tells your readers what you want them to do with the information (2
sentences)
6. Omits the use of the pronoun “you”
7. Work Cited page in the correct MLA format
This essay I did do a little better however I still need a lot to improve on due to the fact that is
was still a low grade.
3. Do the same for your third essay.
1. Thesis statement that reveals to your classmates how effective the author of the peer-review
article is in communicating his/her argument to the members of his/her community.
2. Introduction that hooks readers and narrows your focus in the essay
3. Topic sentences for each paragraph that connect the sub-point of the paragraph to the
controlling idea
4. Evidence from the peer-reviewed article in every paragraph with the correct in-text MLA
citation.
5. Conclusion that summarizes your essay (2 sentences), tells your readers why your analysis is
important (2 sentences), and tells your readers what you want them to do with the information (2
sentences)
6. Omits the use of the pronoun “you” and the pronoun “I”
7. Work Cited page in the correct MLA format