Nora Gonzalez

Unit 3 Peer Review Workshop: Content- [Anna]

1. Does the author present a thesis statement about the rhetorical effectiveness of a peer-
reviewed article? Is this thesis clear and direct? What is it? Mark it in the text. What
suggestions do you have for the writer in order to strengthen the thesis? Has the author chosen
one (and only one) peer-reviewed article to analyze?

—-No thesis statement. Needs to provide use of rhetorical devices.

2. Does the essay include a controlling idea that is not obvious to everyone? In other words, does
it reveal something not everyone would know about how and why this peer-reviewed article is
used? Where can the author develop more of an analysis or more fully develop the ideas?

—--No controlling idea.

3. Does the author use elements from the article to support the thesis made about it? What are
they? Mark them in the text. Are they used as good evidence? Indicate why or why not in the
text. What kind of evidence would help the writer demonstrate his/her point?
—-No thesis provided.

4. Does the essay maintain a cohesive focus around the thesis? Does the author use solid
transitions to guide his/her ideas? Determine, as a reader, how you want to be presented with the
information. Does the organization work for you? Indicate suggestions for organization and
transitions. Also, mark any tangents that you find in the essay.
—--No thesis mentioned.

5. Where could the author use more detail to further illustrate his/her claim? Indicate these places
in the text.
—--Body paragraphs s and introduction.

6. Are the introduction and conclusion focused on the main point of the essay? Does the
conclusion answer the three questions? (1. Did I do what I said I would do? 2. Why is this
important? 3. What do I want my audience to do with this information?)
—-I don’t see a thesis on the intro and no conclusion. Doesn’t provide the three questions.

7. Indicate in the text the author’s strengths and weaknesses.

—-Strength is the transition words and weakness is providing more information on the short
body paragraphs and conclusion and thesis statement.

8. What three revision suggestions do you have for the writer?

—-The meaning of LBP, more information on introduction, and the thesis statement.

9. Indicate in the text where the author needs more details. —Short/less body paragraphs to provide
more information.

10. Indicate in the text where the author needs more evidence. —-Some body paragraphs.

11. Indicate in the text three places where the author deserves praise for this essay. —The word
choices, transition words, and introduction .