GRATITUDE-JOSSEL

Evaluation:

Focus: The essay has a clear focus on examining the causes of teenage pregnancy in the
community of Nug-as. The introduction provides a clear thesis statement and the essay stays on
topic throughout. However, the statement of the problem could be more specific and focused on
the research questions.
Grade: B+

Organization: The essay is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The
body paragraphs are focused on each cause of teenage pregnancy and provide evidence to
support the claims. However, the essay could benefit from more transitional sentences to better
connect the ideas between paragraphs.
Grade: B

Progression: The essay progresses logically and each paragraph builds on the previous one.
However, the essay could benefit from more in-depth analysis and discussion of the causes of
teenage pregnancy.
Grade: B-

Development of Ideas: The essay provides some evidence and examples to support the claims
made. However, the essay could benefit from more specific and detailed examples to better
illustrate the causes of teenage pregnancy. Additionally, the essay could benefit from more
analysis and discussion of the impact of teenage pregnancy on the lives of teenagers.
Grade: B-

Use of Language: The language used in the essay is clear and concise, but could benefit from
more varied sentence structures and vocabulary. Additionally, some sentences are awkwardly
phrased and could be revised for clarity.
Grade: B

Conventions: The essay follows standard conventions of grammar, punctuation, and spelling.
However, there are some errors that could be corrected with careful proofreading.
Grade: B

Language and Vocabulary: The essay uses basic vocabulary and could benefit from more varied
and sophisticated language. Additionally, some words are used incorrectly or inappropriately.
Grade: B-

Suggestions:
- Clarify the statement of the problem to better focus on the research questions.
- Use more transitional sentences to better connect the ideas between paragraphs.
- Provide more specific and detailed examples to better illustrate the causes of teenage
pregnancy.
- Analyze and discuss the impact of teenage pregnancy on the lives of teenagers.
- Use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary.
- Carefully proofread for errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling.
- Use more varied and sophisticated language and ensure words are used correctly.

Overall Grade: B-