WEEK 3 HOMEWORK 

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A.   Evaluate the feedback:

- According to other team members, the essay needs to be more explicit, include more
hedging language, and source citations. Each piece of information must have details,
names, and dates. To make sentences simpler to grasp, linguistic choices must also be
modified. Because this essay is based on a personal opinion on some information, many
words in this essay are still used with a high degree of certainty.

- I can say that getting feedback from teachers and other groups about the essay has been
very beneficial because it has allowed me to hone my essay-writing skills. Additionally,
I discovered more errors in my essay and learned how to write it better.

            B.  Apply essay assessment and give grade:

-     Critical Thinking and Analysis: 17/30

 There is some evidence to support each argument
- Research: Depth, Quality, Use of Evidence: 15/25
 There are around 10 source totally which are used in this essay
- Argument Structure and Development: 19/25
 There are linking words in each paragraph
- Reference: 6/10
- Language use and Style: 8/10
 Wide range of vocabulary and grammar. Although there are still some mistakes

C. Assess the weaknesses and strengths of the first draft version:

- Strengths:
 The cited source is comprehensible, pertinent, and very precise.
 Clearly defined structure with connecting words
 Grammar errors and vocabulary that are varied and flexible

- Weakness: 
  Haven't used many hedging languages.
  There isn't a summary that expresses a viewpoint on the subject.
  Some of the sentences are illogical.
  There are no summary paragraph that show personal view to the topic
  Some sentences contain a lot of bias.
 Word choices can occasionally be difficult to understand.
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