STUDENT: AYMITUMA ACOSTA, DAFNER JANETH

TEACHER: PAUL HARRISON

COURSE: ADVANCE 11

ALP: PORTFOLIO FOR WRITING

2023
TABLE OF CONTENTS
 GRAPHIC ORGANIZER: WRITING 1

QUESTION: Who
wrote the article?
ANSWER: They
were Temple
Grandin and
Catherine Johnson

QUESTION:What is the QUESTION: What is the

conclusion? main idea of the
ANSWER: Animals can article?
display such an ANSWER: some animals
incredible intelligence use their remarkable
to achievewhat they perceptual abilities to
want.
EXTREME get some goals

PERCEPTION
AND ANIMAL
PERCEPTION

QUESTION: What are

QUESTION: How those the examples that
stories are connected? supports the thesis?
ANSWER: Both show ANSWER: The article
how animals solve cites two stpories:
human problems using seizure alert-dogs and
their own capacities. the horse called Clever
Hans
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FIRST DRAFT
In the article “Extreme perception and animal intelligence”, Temple Grandin and
Catherine Johnson explain the exceptional perceptual abilities of animals, focusing on
seizure alert dogs. These are dogs can predict seizures before they occur, although
there is controversy over whether this ability can be trained. Most seizure alert dogs
were initially trained as seizure response dogs, which assist people during seizures.
However, some dogs have developed the ability to sense the signs of an impending
seizure, even though humans cannot detect these signs. The text also compares seizure
alert dogs to Clever Hans that is a horse known for responding to subtle human cues.
Both Hans and seizure alert dogs, which are animals with extraordinary capacities,
showcase their comprehension by acquiring skills without human help. Besides, this
confronts the idea that human beings are more intelligence, which has been the
distinguishing trait that makes us unique as a species. The article concludes that the
actions of seizure alert dogs and Clever Hans are signs of high intelligence, as they are
using their built-in perceptual and cognitive skills to achieve useful goals.
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EVIDENCE OF CORRECTION

In the article “Extreme perception and animal intelligence”, Temple Grandin and
Catherine Johnson explain the exceptional perceptual abilities of animals. These are
dogs can predict seizures before they occur, although there is controversy over
whether this ability can be trained. Most seizure alert dogs were initially trained as
seizure response dogs, which assist people during seizures. However, some dogs have
developed the ability to sense the signs of an impending seizure, even though humans
cannot detect these signs. The text also compares seizure alert dogs to Clever Hans,
which is a horse known for responding to subtle human cues. Both Hans and seizure
alert dogs are animals that have extraordinary capacities show their comprehension by
acquiring skills without human help. Besides, this confronts the idea that humans, who
were considered a unique species for their reasoning capacity, are not the unique
beings that present it. Therefore, the actions of seizure alert dogs and Clever Hans are
signs of superior intelligence. The article concludes that they are making use of their
perception and cognitive skills to achieve useful goals like people do.
 WRITING 1
In the article "Extreme Perception and animal intelligence", Temple Grandin and
Catherine Johnson discuss the exceptional perceptual abilities of animals, focusing on
seizure-alert dogs. These are dogs that can predict seizures before they occur,
although there is controversy over whether this skill can be trained.
Most seizure-alert dogs were initially trained as seizure response dogs, which assist
people during seizures. However, some dogs have developed the capacity to sense
the signs of an impending seizure, even though, humans can't detect these signs. The
article also compares seizure-alert dogs to Clever Hans, which is a horse known for
responding to subtle human cues. Both Hans and seizure-alert dogs show their
reasoning by acquiring skills without human help.
Besides this confronts the general idea that humans, who were considered the most
advanced species, are not the unique species that present those traits. Therefore, the
actions of seizure-alert dogs are examples of superior intelligence. The article
concludes that they use their perception and cognitive abilities to achieve certain
goals as people do.
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Leisure time
- experiences on virtual
reality
- advanced forms of
entertainment
- space tourism

Comunication
Education
- holographic and 3D
- personalized and
communication
adaptive learning
- Telepathic or brain-
- inmerse viertual learning
computer interfaces
- global and collaborative
- Multilingual and instant
learning
translation

MY PERFECT
VACATIONS

House Job
- smart and connected - Automation and AI
homes integration
- sustainable and eco- - Specialized and creative
friendly designs professions
- flexibles and adaptable - Technological and
spaces scientific advancements
 SECOND DRAFT
I am living in a bustling city where skyscrapers stretched to incredible heights,
shimmering with holographic displays and integrated AI systems. I am a brilliant
engineer, specializing in the development of renewable energy solutions that powered
the city and sustained the planet. My mornings start with a perfect integration of
technology into my daily routine. As I wake up, smart sensors in my bedroom detect
my movements and adjust lighting and temperature to match with my preferences. 

Besides, they greet and provide me a rundown of my daily schedule, news updates,
and weather forecasts. I use my voice to give orders to my personal assistant which is
embedded in my home’s. Sometimes, I tell him to show me my social media, the
options of the breakfast I want or the tasks left at work. Later, my personal
transportation system that is an autonomous electric vehicle, efficiently takes me to
my school. Traffic congestion is virtually non-existent due to advanced traffic
management systems, making my trip faster and stress-free. 

When I was younger my education took place through virtual classrooms, with
holographic teachers guiding students through immersive lessons tailored to their
unique learning styles. Now, at work, I am in technologically advanced environment. 
Many traditional jobs have been automated, allowing me to focus on creative and
complex tasks. Artificial intelligence and robotics have become integral parts of the
workforce, collaborating with humans to achieve unprecedented levels of productivity.

During your leisure time, immersive virtual reality experiences transport you to distant
worlds, historical eras, or fantastic realms. Therefore, I formed deep connections with
people from different corners of the world, forging friendships and collaborating on
virtual projects that pushed the boundaries of my creativity and innovation.

It's important to note that alongside these great advancements, challenges may arise.
In brief, my day-to-day life in 2175 is marked by seamless integration of technology,
efficient transportation, augmented work environments, and immersive experiences.
The future offers unparalleled convenience and opportunities for personal growth. But
I need to take into account ethical considerations and the responsible use of
technology to ensure a harmonious and equitable society.
 EVIDENCE OF CORRECTION OF THE SECOND DRAFT
In 2175, my day-to-day life will be drastically different from my ancestors experience in
the past. Technological advancements have reshaped every aspect of society,
promising a life filled with awe-inspiring possibilities and potential drawbacks. My
journey through life was shaped by the incredible advancements and challenges of this
futuristic era.

I am living in a bustling city where skyscrapers stretched to incredible heights,

shimmering with holographic displays and integrated AI systems. My mornings start
with a perfect integration of technology into my daily routine. As I wake up, smart
sensors in my bedroom detect my movements and adjust lighting and temperature to
my liking.

I use my voice to give orders to my personal assistant, which is embedded in my home,

to greet and provide me a rundown of my daily schedule, news updates, and weather
forecasts. Later, my personal transportation system that is an autonomous electric
vehicle, efficiently takes me to work. Traffic congestion is virtually non-existent, so I
always arrive punctually.

When I was younger my education took place through virtual classrooms, with
holographic teachers guiding students through immersive lessons tailored to their
unique learning styles. Now, at work, I am in technologically advanced
environment. Many traditional jobs have been automated, allowing me to focus on
creative and complex tasks. Artificial intelligence and robotics have become integral
parts of the workforce, collaborating with humans to achieve unprecedented levels of
productivity.

During my leisure time, immersive virtual reality experiences transport you to

immeasurably distant worlds, historical eras, or fantastic realms. Therefore, I formed
deep connections with people from different corners of the world, forging friendships
and collaborating on virtual projects that pushed the boundaries of my creativity and
innovation.

In brief, my day-to-day life in 2175 is marked by seamless integration of technology,

efficient transportation, augmented work environments, and immersive experiences.
But I need to consider ethical considerations and the responsible use of technology to
ensure a harmonious and equitable society. Despite the challenges may arise,
ultimately there are these great advancements and awesome opportunities for
personal growth.
 WRITING 2
In 2175, my day-to-day life will be drastically disparate from what my ancestors have
experienced in the past. Technological advancements have reshaped every aspect of
society, promising a life filled with awe-inspiring possibilities and potential
drawbacks. My journey through life has touched the great advancements and
challenges of this futuristic era.

I am living in a bustling city where skyscrapers stretched to incredible heights,

shimmering holographic displays, and an integrated AI system. As I wake up, smart
sensors in my bedroom detect my movements and adjust lighting and temperature to
my liking. Also, I use my voice to give commands to my personal assistant to provide
me with a rundown of my daily schedule, news, updates, and weather forecast. So, I
need them for my everyday activities.

Traffic congestion is practically non-existent. My personal transportation system,

which is an autonomous electric vehicle, efficiently takes me to work punctually. At
work, many traditional jobs have been automated, allowing me to focus on creative
and complex tasks. Artificial intelligence and robotics have become integral parts of
the workforce, collaborating with humans to achieve high levels of productivity.

During my leisure time, immersive virtual reality experiences transport me to

immeasurably distant worlds and fantastic realms. Therefore, I formed deep
connections with people from different corners of the world. In that way, I make
friends and collaborate on virtual projects that pushed the boundaries of my
creativity and innovation.

In brief, my life in 2175 is marked by the integration of technology, efficient

transportation, excellent work environments, and immersive experiences. But, there's
also a bad side like cybercrime and ethical dilemmas. Despite the challenges that may
arise, ultimately there are great advantages and awesome opportunities for personal
growth.
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PROS
Incrased civic engagement
Skill development and personal
growth
Social cohesion and community
building
Adressing societal issues
CONS
Lack of genuine motivation
Infringement on personal
freedom
Potential for exploitation
Negative attitudes towards
volunteering
Limited focus on individual
interests
 OUTLINE
1. Introduction and thesis statement: Volunteering is an essential
activity that brings countless benefits to individuals, and society. For
this reason, in this essay I will present my opinion in favor of
volunteering programs.

2. First strong argument: social impact

a. builds an inclusive and equitable society
b. tackle poverty problems
c. help in environmental issues

3. Second strong argument: personal growth and development

a. gain new perspectives of life
b. develops essential life skills
c. enhances self- confidence

4. Third strong argument: social bonds and communities

a. creates spaces for collaboration
b. fosters a sense of unity and belonging
c. nurture a sense of civic responsibility

5. Conclusion: Volunteering programs mean the power of collective

action and the transformative impact of this selfless service. That’s
why it’s important to support and promote these programs for the
well- being of the society
 THIRD DRAFT
Mandatory volunteering is an essential activity that brings countless benefits to
individuals, communities, and society as a whole. By offering one's time and skills for
the betterment of others, volunteering creates a positive impact that extends far
beyond immediate beneficiaries. In this essay, I will present my opinion in favor of
mandatory volunteering programs, highlighting the profound value they hold in
promoting social cohesion, personal growth, and the development of empathetic and
responsible citizens.
Volunteering programs play a crucial role in addressing social challenges and bringing
about positive change. Volunteers have the power to tackle pressing issues, ranging
from poverty alleviation and education to environmental conservation and
community development. Through collective efforts, volunteering programs create a
ripple effect that can transform communities, uplift marginalized groups, and build a
more inclusive and equitable society.
Engaging in volunteer work provides individuals with invaluable opportunities for
personal growth and development. Volunteers often find themselves exposed to
diverse cultures, backgrounds, and challenges, enabling them to broaden their
horizons, foster empathy, and strengthen their interpersonal skills. The act of giving
back can lead to a deep sense of fulfillment, purpose, and gratitude, positively
influencing volunteers' overall well-being.
Volunteering acts as a catalyst for social cohesion and community building. As
individuals come together with a shared purpose, they forge meaningful connections
and build networks that transcend traditional boundaries. Volunteering programs
create spaces for collaboration, mutual support, and the exchange of ideas. By
working side by side, people from different backgrounds and walks of life discover
common ground, fostering a sense of unity and belonging.
Mandatory volunteering programs are a testament to the power of collective action
and the transformative impact of selfless service. By engaging in volunteer work,
individuals not only contribute to society but also experience personal growth,
develop vital skills, and foster social cohesion. As we recognize the immense value of
volunteering, it becomes essential to support and promote these programs. Let us
embrace the spirit of volunteerism and harness its potential to create a world built on
compassion, understanding, and shared responsibility.
 EVIDENCE OF CORRECTION OF THE THIRD DRAFT
Mandatory volunteering is an essential activity that brings countless benefits to
individuals, communities, and society as a whole. I know that it’s a huge challenge,
although, volunteering creates a positive impact that extends far beyond immediate
beneficiaries. In this essay, I will present my opinion in favor of mandatory
volunteering programs, highlighting the profound value they hold in promoting social
cohesion, personal growth, and the development of empathetic and responsible
citizens.
Volunteering programs play a crucial role in addressing social challenges and bringing
about positive change. Volunteers have the power to tackle pressing issues, ranging
from poverty alleviation and education to environmental conservation and
community development. Through collective efforts, volunteering programs create a
ripple effect that can transform communities, uplift marginalized groups, and build a
more inclusive and equitable society.
Engaging in volunteer work provides individuals with invaluable opportunities for
personal growth and development. Volunteers often find themselves exposed to
diverse cultures, backgrounds, and challenges, enabling them to broaden their
horizons, foster empathy, and strengthen their interpersonal skills. The act of giving
back can lead to a deep sense of fulfillment, purpose, and gratitude, positively
influencing volunteers' overall well-being.
Volunteering acts as a catalyst for social cohesion and community building. As
individuals come together with a shared purpose, they forge meaningful connections
and build networks that transcend traditional boundaries. Volunteering programs
create spaces for collaboration, mutual support, and the exchange of ideas. By
working side by side, people from different backgrounds and walks of life discover
common ground, fostering a sense of unity and belonging.
Mandatory volunteering programs are a testament to the power of collective action
and the transformative impact of selfless service. By engaging in volunteer work,
individuals not only contribute to society but also experience personal growth,
develop vital skills, and foster social cohesion. As we recognize the immense value of
volunteering, it becomes essential to support and promote these programs. Let us
embrace the spirit of volunteerism and harness its potential to create a world built on
compassion, understanding, and shared responsibility.
THIRD WRITING