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intimidating to me. Each summer I’d get invited to pool parties and
make excuses why I couldn’t venture far from the steps. I knew
diving board just like a normal kid, so the summer I turned nine, I
finally agreed to take swimming lessons. Learning to swim was one
nervous. I stood timidly by the side of the pool waiting for the other
students to show up. A tall red-headed boy and twin girls about my
oldest student in the class . The friendly teacher swam to the ladder,
introduced herself and got us all into the pool. I was glad the water
in this training pool was only four feet deep! During that first
lesson we concentrated on floating on our backs. Floating face up
wasn’t too threatening because my face was out of the water and the
the next day, I discovered the second lesson would significantly test
My face went into the water during swimming lesson two. The
teacher gave us foam kick boards. She held the curved front of the
kick board, and we held the flat back end with our arms outstretched .
position . She had us put our face in the water and kick 10 times
before coming up for air. She held the kick board while we kicked, so
we would not move into deep water. Even with that assurance, I let
all the other students go first. It was my turn. I tried kicking with
the kick board and got out of the pool without finishing my turn. The
teacher got out of the pool and spoke kindly to me. She said, “Many
students are afraid at first, but with practice anyone can learn.” I
summer.
about eight feet from the pool’s edge, my teacher explained I only
had to swim a short distance. She wanted me to swim freestyle
to start my swim. I swam two strokes towards the pool’s edge before
had to sputter for breath, as I made my way from the center of the
pool back to the safety of the edge. I moved my arms over my head,
kicked my legs and this time I made it all the way to the side without
times before class ended. Puffed with the confidence that comes from
intimidating to me. Each summer I’d get invited to pool parties and
make excuses why I couldn’t venture far from the steps. I knew
diving board just like a normal kid, so the summer I turned nine, I
nervous. I stood timidly by the side of the pool waiting for the other
introduced herself and got us all into the pool. During that first
lesson we concentrated on floating on our backs. I left lesson one
confidence.
My face went into the water during swimming lesson two. The
teacher gave us foam kick boards. She had us put our face in the
water and kick 10 times before coming up for air. It was my turn. I
let go of the kick board and got out of the pool without finishing my
that summer.
During swimming lesson 17, I actually swam. My teacher explained I
only had to swim a short distance. I swam two strokes towards the
pool’s edge before standing and reaching for the side. I started my
next swim farther away from the edge. This time I made it all the
way to the side without standing or dieing. I repeated this feat two
more times before class ended. Puffed with the confidence that
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Narrative Essay Assignment #1
Directions: Using the swimming essay as a guide, write your own essay about something
challenging you or someone close to you learned to do over time. Your thesis could be about
learning to play a musical instrument, sticking with a fitness routine, coping with a disability,
or any other challenge mastered step by step. This could be a challenge recently met or one
mastered long ago. For the best results, choose to write about a challenging experience you are
very familiar with.
Introduction:
In this paragraph, you, the writer should background why this challenge was important to master.
Tell about times your subject tried to learn before. Explain what may have interfered with previous
attempts. Help us understand why this challenge is so difficult for you to master. Tell us the
inspiration which led to this final, successful effort you’ve chosen to write about.
The writer may borrow the same thesis used in the example swimming essay and substitute in the
challenge he/she will write about in their own narrative essay. Here is an example of how to use the
borrowed thesis.
Learning (to play the violin) was one of the most challenging things I have ever done.
The writer may also construct their own unique thesis. In this exercise, the thesis will appear as the
final sentence of the introduction.
Body paragraph 1:
Begin with a topic sentence that introduces the first step taken to master this challenge. This topic
sentence could discuss the first lesson, the first week of training or the first skill learned in a series.
In this narrative it is suggested that all topic sentences parallel the sentence pattern set by the first
topic sentence composed for body paragraph 1.
Continue body paragraph 1 by thoroughly describing that first lesson, or first week or first skill
learned. You may choose to write the yellow sentences for this paragraph first and go back and add
the red details later. (Remember prepositional phrases and dialogue can also add detail.) All writers
return to their essay many times to improve and edit.
Finish this paragraph with a blue transition. This transition helps the essay reader to know that time
passes between body paragraphs 1 and 2. It is acceptable to borrow the example transition below
and make a few changes to match your topic. As always, you may create your own transition.
When I returned the next day, I discovered the second lesson would significantly test my new
found confidence.
Body paragraph 2:
Begin with a topic sentence similar to that written for body paragraph 1. Notice the first topic
sentence in the example essay spoke about swimming lesson 1 and the second topic sentence spoke
about swimming lesson 2. By reusing the phrase “swimming lesson” in each topic sentence it helps
improve the clarity and flow of the writing.
The topic sentence for body paragraph 2 should show the subject part way through meeting his/her
challenge.
Try to include at least six, red, detail sentences in this paragraph. Remember that red detail
sentences must further explain a yellow fact or example. In this narrative essay pattern, the red
detail sentences follow the yellow fact/example sentences they describe.
End with a transition sentence that shows the subject making progress towards meeting their goal.
Begin with a topic sentence similar to that written for body paragraphs 1 and 2. This topic sentence
should show the subject about to complete or finally completing the challenge started at the
beginning of the essay.
Use dialogue or prepositional phrases to add detail in this paragraph. Doing so makes sentences
more complex and varied.
“Oh my gosh, I really did swim,” I thought to myself after realizing my accomplishment.
(dialogue) (prep phrase)
The climax is reached and the challenge is mastered in this body paragraph. Your subject is likely
excited and proud. Telling the emotions he/she is feeling, provides an excellent opportunity to add
extra descriptive detail to your essay.
Finish this final body paragraph with a transition to the conclusion. You may borrow all or part of
the transition given in the sample essay.
Puffed with the confidence that comes from accomplishing a difficult task, I left lesson 17 a
different person. I was really looking forward to my next pool party.
Conclusion:
In the final paragraph of this narrative essay share, the confidence gained when the subject met their
goal. What has now changed because this challenge was met? Discuss new things the subject will
try to accomplish now that they have mastered this challenge. Restate your thesis.
Comment: Reusing some words from both the background information found in the introduction and
those used in the original thesis satisfies the essay readers need for completion. Do not recopy your
entire thesis and introduction, instead repeat a few key words or reorder the sentence.
Editing:
I suggest using green, yellow and pink high lighters to identify the topic sentences, facts/example
sentences and details to assist with editing. Box the thesis and restatement of thesis.
Name: Name:
Are all three topic sentences written in a parallel form? 0, 1, 2, 3 pts Topic sentences and transitions increase essay flow? 0, 1, 2, 3 pts
Are transitions present between body paragraphs? 0, 1, 2, 3 pts Appropriate facts/examples support topic sentences? 0, 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6 pts
Numerous details provide clarity and description. 0, 1, 2, 3, 4 pts The quality and quantity of details were improved 0, 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6 pts
Thesis was restated in conclusion. 0, 1 pt Suggested improvements made to the conclusion? 0, 1, 2 pts
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Attend a multicultural ceremony, like Confirmation, a Bar Mitzvah, a Quinceañera or a Hindu Vedic wedding
ceremony. (Receive approval from the instructor for your ceremony choice.) Make sure that you choose an invent
with which you are unfamiliar. Using the swimming essay as a guide, write a narrative essay about what happened
at the event.
In the introduction, tell what you knew about this cultural happening before you arrived to witness it. Write a
thesis about how unusual or interesting you found the event to be.
Use the first body paragraph to discuss what you saw before the ceremony began.
Use the second body paragraph to detail a particularly unique part of the ceremony.
Use the third body paragraph to explain what happened after the formal ceremony.
In your conclusion restate your thesis then review what you learned about this culture after attending the ceremony.
Option 2
Take a field trip to a museum you have never visited before. Using the swimming essay as your guide, write a
narrative essay about what you saw at the museum. Write this essay as if you were a travel guide leading a group
of tourists through the museum.
In the introduction, tell when the museum was built, who assembled the collections in the museum and what
days/hours it is open. Write a thesis explaining what type of items tourists can expect to see on their tour of the
museum.
Use the first body paragraph to discuss what exhibits are seen as you first enter the museum.
Use the second body paragraph to detail a particularly unique or valuable exhibit within the museum.
Use the third body paragraph to explain an exhibit displayed at the end of the museum tour.
In your conclusion restate your thesis then review what you learned about this museum after visiting it.