WRITING

As I look ahead to the next ten years of my life, I am good. The future is always
uncertain, but I am optimistic about what I hope to achieve in the coming years and
what I hope to be doing in ten years' time.

Firstly, I hope to have established a successful and fulfilling career in my chosen field.
I am passionate about making a positive impact in my work and helping others, and I
hope to be in a position where I can do just that.

In addition to my career, I also hope to have a strong and loving family. I believe that
family is the best thing of a fulfilling life,

Finally, I hope to be actively engaged in my football community. Whether it's look

football matches and give my opinion about the match.

In conclusion, while the future is always uncertain, I am hopeful and optimistic about
what I hope to be doing in ten years' time. With hard work, dedication I thin that I
can get thinks that I like.

Main corrections

I am feeling good/positive.
watch football matches
I think that I can get/achieve things that I want

Content(3/5)- All content is relevant and on the whole the reader is informed. To
improve, you could have added more detail about wanting to have a family. E.g explaining
why having a family is the best thing and fulfilling to you. Also, give more information
about how you will engage in the football community. Say what teams/which stadium you
would like to go to and why. Would you like to be a volunteer or coach in the sport? (You
can make this up, it doesn;t have to be true). Don’t forget to add a title to your article.

Organisation (5/5)- The article is very well organised and coherent using a variety of
linking words and cohesive devices.. Most of the paragraphs are equally balanced.

Communicative Achievement(3/5)- Uses conventions of the task to hold’s the reader

attention and to communicate straightforward ideas. Informal and friendly tone.
Language(2/5): Use of everyday vocabulary used in a generally appropriate way.. Errors
do not impede communication. However, you must include a range of tenses, not just the
present to attract the reader’s attention. Don’t forget to add fun titles and use more
emotive language and punctuation, such as question marks, exclamation marks, ellipses.

Total-(13/20)