Academic Register SUGGESTED ANSWERS

Task: The following sentences provide examples of incorrect academic register. Find the
errors in each sentence and write a corrected sentence below.

1 International students who come to Australia to study are very affluent.

Many international students who come to Australia to study are very affluent.
Some international students who come to Australia to study, are very affluent.
I think that most challenges faced by international students can be solved with the
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government’s help.
Most challenges faced by international students can be solved with the government’s
help; The government can solve many of the challenges faced by international students.
Because of the rapid deterioration of the world’s rainforests, many of our planet’s wildlife
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are becoming endangered or extinct.
Due to the rapid deterioration of the world’s rainforests, many of the planet’s wildlife are
becoming endangered or extinct; Much of the planet’s wildlife are becoming endangered
or extinct, due to the rapid deterioration of the world’s rainforests.
4 The students read a variety of articles that the EAP department provided for them.
The students read a variety of articles that the English for Academic Purposes department
provided for them.
There are plenty of problems with the pollution levels in many places around the world
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and this is bad.
There are many problems with the pollution levels in many places around the world; The
pollution levels in many places around the world are having a negative impact upon the
earth.
6 It is believed that many things have contributed to global warming and climate change.
It is believed that many factors have contributed to global warming and climate change.
A solution to the ongoing problem of global warming must be figured out very soon or we
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will all die.
If a solution to the ongoing problem of global warming is not addressed soon, humanity
will perish; Humanity will cease to exist if a solution to the ongoing problem of global
warming is not addressed immediately.
A group of scientists in Australia are currently working on a plan to save the Great Barrier
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Reef. This is amazing news.
Scientists in Australia are currently working on a plan to save the Great Barrier Reef;
Australian scientists are currently working on a plan to save the Great Barrier Reef.
Because of the extreme interest in exporting coal from Queensland, the Australian
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government finds itself between a rock and a hard place.
As a result of the extreme interest in exporting coal from Queensland, the Australian
government is in a difficult position; The extreme interest in exporting coal from
Queensland has caused the Australian government to be in a very difficult situation.
10 What’s more, the government doesn’t even seem to be worried about this issue.
Furthermore, the government does not appear to be worried about this issue.
 In a recent study, it was found that 2/3 of the world’s potable water is undrinkable. This
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has had many disastrous effects on the 7 billion people in the world.
In a recent study, it was found that approximately 66% of the world’s potable water is
undrinkable. This has had many disastrous effects on the seven billion people in the
world.
A researcher from the University of Melbourne are looking at how to improve the
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experiences of international students. So far, he is not having much success.
A researcher from the University of Melbourne is looking at how to improve the
experiences of international students and is not experiencing much success; A University
of Melbourne researcher is looking at how to improve the experiences of international
students, without much success.
In a bid to help lower third world country debt, the IMF has lowered interest rates to
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2.8%.
In a bid to help lower third world country debt, the International Monetary Fund has
lowered interest rates to 2.8%.