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ENGLISH
Quarter 4 – Module 8:
Revising the Persuasive Essay

Department of Education - MIMAROPA Region

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English – Grade 6
Quarter 4 – Module 8: Revising the Persuasive Essay
First Edition, 2020

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Introductory Message
For the facilitator
This module is prepared to facilitate teaching and assess learning of the
competency – Revise writing for clarity – correct spelling, appropriate
punctuation marks, transition / signal words. This learning package
consists of a series of activity sheets to be done by the learner. You are
requested to provide assistance as the learner goes through the activities by
clarifying directions and discussing important concepts to be learned.
This module makes use of texts which serve as springboard for skill
development. A number of exercises are provided before the learner is asked
to revise writing for clarity – correct spelling, appropriate punctuation marks,
transition / signal words.

For the learner:

This module is a learning material carefully prepared for you. It contains
a number of exercises to help you revise writing for clarity – correct spelling,
appropriate punctuation marks, transition / signal words.
As you go about this module, there are reminders for you to follow to
ensure that learning is successful:

• Find time to answer the activities in this module.

• Create a happy, caring and encouraging mood.
• Work in a quiet place.
• Read the general instructions/ directions carefully. Clarify and discuss
the key concepts to be learned with your teacher, learning buddy.
− Finish this module in the allotted time and follow what this module
tells you.

This learning module package consists of a series of activities. It

features the following important parts:

• What I Need To Know. This part tells what are expected of the
learner and clearly explains what competencies, knowledge, skills and
attitude he/she must have learned at the end of the learning sessions.

• What I Know. This parts assesses the learner’s understanding of the

past lesson.

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 • What’s In. This part introduces the new lesson, serves as the pretest
which engages the learner’s interest and leads the learners towards
the performance of the tasks.

• What’s New. This part serves as the reading time when he learns key
concepts of the lesson at hand.

• What Is It. This part presents an initial activity about the new skill.

• What’s More. This provides a series of activities – drills, experiences

and activities which provide enough practice for the learners so that
they can perform the skills automatically.

• What Have I Learned. This states the important concept leaned from
the series of activities.

• What I Can Do. This part encourages the learner to work

independently for further application of knowledge and skills.

• What I Can Do More. This serves as the highlight of the series where
the learners measure his level of mastery of the skill upon completion
of the tasks.

• Answer Keys. This section provides answer keys for the series of
activities.

• References. These include list of resources that the learners may refer
to, for further reading.

Please do not write anything on this module as this will be used by other
learners like you. Use either your paper or test notebook to answer the
different activities.

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 What I Need to Know

This module was designed and written based on your level of

understanding. It is here to help you revise writing for clarity-correct spelling,
appropriate punctuation marks, transition/signal words. The language and
vocabulary used is intended for you as intermediate pupil.

This module focuses on this learning competency:

Revise writing for clarity-correct spelling, appropriate punctuation
marks, transition/signal words.

After going through this module, you are expected to:

− Self-check/revise writing for clarity-correct spelling, appropriate
punctuation marks, transition/signal words.

What I Know

This part intends to gauge learner’s understanding of the previous

lesson. Thus, this part comes in a form of a review.

Directions: Revise each sentence by correcting errors in spelling and use of

punctuations. Rewrite them on a sheet of paper.

1. we are wat we it
2. health is welt
3. eating ryt gives us gud filling
4. exercyst meyks us fit
5. gud nutrition is needed by the Body

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 Lesson Revising the Persuasive Essay

As an intermediate pupil, you should know how to revise writing for

clarity-correct spelling, appropriate punctuation marks, transition/signal
words. It is important for you to know how to revise writing for clarity-correct
spelling, appropriate punctuation marks, transition/signal words to apply the
knowledge you gained from previous lessons. You must be familiar and be
aware on spelling of the words and use transition words properly.

What’s In

I have here a paragraph on being fit. Read it and notice how it is written.

being fit is a way of saying a person eats well gets a lot of physical activity
and has a healthy weight If you’re fit your body works well feels good and
can do all the things you want to do like run around with your friends What
does it feel like to be full When you’re eating notice how your body feels and
when your stomach feels comfortably full Sometimes people eat too much
because they dont notice when they need to stop eating. Eating too much
can make you feel uncomfortable and over a period of time can lead to
unhealthy weight gain
Avenues in English 6 p.65

Comprehension Check-up
− What is the text about?
− How does a person become fit?
− What happens when a person overeats?

Ask: What did you notice with the text? Does it need revising? What errors
need to be corrected?

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Say: Correct spelling, appropriate punctuation marks, and correct use of
transition/ signal words are some of the common things to consider in
writing effectively. Errors in these areas require revising.
Let us go back to the text we just read. Let us revise it together.

Note: Teacher guides the pupils in revising the text.

Being fit is a way of saying a person eats well, gets a lot of physical
activity and has a healthy weight. If you’re fit, your body works well, feels
good and can do all the things you want to do like running around with your
friends. What does it feel like to be full? When you’re eating, notice how
your body feels and when your stomach feels comfortably full. Sometimes
people eat too much because they don’t notice when they need to stop
eating. Eating too much can make you feel uncomfortable and over a period
of time can lead to unhealthy weight gain.
-Avenues in English 6 p.65

*Observe that we have corrected at least 15 errors which include indention,

capitalization and correct use of punctuation marks.

What’s New

Tips for Revising One’s Written Work

In revising a written work, take note of these important questions:

− Are the sentences free of errors in grammar and usage?

− Did you spell each word correctly?
− Did you use capital letters when needed?
− Did you punctuate each sentence correctly?

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 − Did you indent paragraphs as needed and leave proper margins on
each side of the paper?
− Did you use appropriate transition to show how ideas are related to
one another?
English Communication Skills in the New Millennium p. C46, C110

What Is It

Directions: Revise the given text. Observe correct spelling, appropriate

punctuation marks and correct transition words.

the Stonecutter

there was once a stone cutter who was dissatisfied with himself and with his
position in life.
one day he pased a wealthy merchants house. through the open gateway,
he saw manny fine possessions and important visitors. "How powerful that
merchant must be!" thought the stone cutter. He became very envious and
wished that he could be like the merchant.
to his great surprise, he sudenly became the merchant, enjoying more
luxuries and power than he had ever imagined but envied and detisted by
those les wealthy than himself. soon a high official passed by, carried in a
sedan chair, accompanied by atendants and escorted by soldiers beating
gongs. Everyone, no matter how wealthy, had to bow low before the
procession. "How powerful that official is!" he thought. I wish that I could be
a high official!

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The individual output will be rated using this rubric:
5 points - when
a. indention made is appropriate
b. capitalization made is appropriate
c. misspelled words are corrected
d. punctuation marks used are appropriate
e. transition words/signal words used are suitable
4 points - when 4 indicators are met
3 points - when 3 indicators are met
2 points - when 2 indicators are met
1 point - when 1 indicator is met

What’s More

Activity 1 – Let’s Find Out

Directions: Revise the given text. Observe correct spelling,
appropriate punctuation marks and correct transition
words. Your output will be rated using the rubric in What
Is It.

where does dirt come from Here’s an example When a three

falls in the forest, a crew of dicomposers shows up to help
break it down. the first to arrive are the fungi, which include
mushrooms and molds. different kinds of molds apear on
and spread over the tree, eventually breaking it down. The
second to arrive are the bacteria and diferent kinds of
bacteria eat different nutrients in the three. This process
takes a very long time (it can take years), but eventually the
decomposed tree becomes part of the soil on the forest flor

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 Activity 2- “Correct Me”
Directions: Revise the given text. Observe correct spelling,
appropriate punctuation marks and correct transition
words. Your output will be rated using the rubric in What
Is It.

MIMAROPA also known as Region IV-B is a region of the

Phillippines locate in Luzon The name is an acronym that
stands for the provinces, comprising the region, namely:
Mindoro Marinduque Romblon and Palawan The region was
create on May 17 2002, after Region IV (Southern Tagalog)
was further sub-divided

What I Have Learned

What do we consider in revising a composition?

In revising writing, you need to consider

correct spelling, appropriate punctuation
marks and correct transition words.

What I Can Do

Activity 3 – Let’s Do This

Directions: Revise the given text. Observe correct spelling, appropriate

punctuation marks and correct transition words. Your output will be rated
using the rubric in What Is It.

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education plays a vital role in shapng sucessful people it gives us the
opportunity to become a productive member of a civilized society by acquiring
all the necessary skills. We learn how to met challenges and overcome
obstacles. We learn how to become an integrated personality and maintain
the perpetuation of our culture people learn basic norms, rules, regulations,
and values of society through education. Moreover high quality education
enables us to lead a succesful life, enhances our intelligence skills knowledge
and brings positive changes in our life

What I Can Do On My Own

Directions: Revise the given text. Observe correct

spelling, appropriate punctuation marks and correct
transition words. Your output will be rated using the
rubric in What Is It.

the wisdom of King solomon

two women came to the palace and stood before the
king. The first woman said, Oh my lord, I and this woman
dwell in one house and I was delivered of a child with her
in the house. And it came to pass the third day after that
i was delivered, that this woman delivered also. And this
woman’s child died in the night because she overlaid it.
She arose at midnight and took my son from beside me,
laid him in her boosom and laid her dead child in my
bosom when I woke up to give my child suck, behold it
was dead.

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 then the other woman said, No, the alive one is my
son and then dead is yours. Then the king said, bring
me a sword.
and the men brought the sword before the king. And
the king said, divide the living child in two, and give half
to the one and the other half to the other.

What I Can Do More

Directions: Revise the given text. Observe correct

spelling, appropriate punctuation marks and correct
transition words. Your output will be rated using the
rubric in What Is It.

fat-soluble vitamins

vitamins A D E and K are known as the fat soluble vitamins. unlike water-
soluble vitamin, this vitamins are stored in the bodys fatty tissue As opposed
2 water-soluble vitamins, dey are not discharged in the urine. however, they
become toxsic when the excess quantities consumed get stored in small
amounts with in the body

-Integrated English for Effective Communication 6p. 300

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 Answer Key

What I Know
1. We are what we eat.
2. Health is wealth.
3. Eating right gives us good feeling.
4. Exercise makes us fit.
5. Good nutrition is needed by the body.

What Is It
The Stonecutter
There was once a stone cutter who was dissatisfied with himself and
with his position in life.
One day he passed a wealthy merchant's house. Through the open
gateway, he saw many fine possessions and important visitors. "How powerful
that merchant must be!" thought the stone cutter. He became very envious
and wished that he could be like the merchant.
To his great surprise, he suddenly became the merchant, enjoying more
luxuries and power than he had ever imagined, but envied and detested by
those less wealthy than himself. Soon a high official passed by, carried in a
sedan chair, accompanied by attendants and escorted by soldiers beating
gongs. Everyone, no matter how wealthy, had to bow low before the
procession. "How powerful that official is!" he thought. "I wish that I could be
a high official!”

What’s More
Activity 1 – Let’s Find Out
Where does dirt come from? Here’s an example. When a tree falls in
the forest, a crew of decomposers shows up to help break it down. The first to
arrive are the fungi, which include mushrooms and molds. Different kinds of
molds appear on and spread over the tree, eventually breaking it down. The
second to arrive are the bacteria, and different kinds of bacteria eat different
nutrients in the tree. This process takes a very long time (it can take years),
but eventually the decomposed tree becomes part of the soil on the forest
floor.

Activity 2 – Correct Me
MIMAROPA, also known as Region IV-B, is a region of the Philippines
located in Luzon. The name is an acronym that stands for the provinces,
comprising the region, namely: Mindoro, Marinduque, Romblon, and
Palawan. The region was created on May 17, 2002, after Region IV (Southern
Tagalog) was further sub-divided.

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What I Can Do
Activity 3 – Let’s Do This
Education plays a vital role in shaping successful people. It gives us the
opportunity to become a productive member of a civilized society by acquiring
all the necessary skills. We learn how to meet challenges and overcome
obstacles. We learn how to become an integrated personality and maintain
the perpetuation of our culture. People learn basic norms, rules, regulations,
and values of society through education. Moreover, high quality education
enables us to lead a successful life, enhances our intelligence, skills,
knowledge, and brings positive changes in our life.

What I Can Do On My Own

The Wisdom of King Solomon
Two women came to the palace and stood before the king. The first
woman said, “Oh my lord, I and this woman dwell in one house and I was
delivered of a child with her in the house. And it came to pass the third day
after that I was delivered, that this woman delivered also. And this woman’s
child died in the night because she overlaid it. She arose at midnight , and
took my son from beside me, laid him in her bosom and laid her dead child in
my bosom. When I woke up to give my child suck, behold it was dead”.
Then the other woman said, “No, the alive one is my son and then dead is
yours”. Then, the king said, “ Bring me a sword.”
And the men brought the sword before the king. And the king said, “
Divide the living child in two, and give half to the one and the other half to the
other.”

What I Can Do More

Fat-soluble Vitamins
Vitamins A, D, E and K are known as the fat-soluble vitamins.
Unlike water-soluble vitamins, these vitamins are stored in the body’s
fatty tissue. As opposed to water-soluble vitamins, they are not
discharged in the urine. However, they become toxic when the excess
quantities consumed get stored in small amounts within the body.
- Integrated English for Effective Communication 6 p. 300

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References

Books:
Avenues in English 6 p.65

Eusebio, Maria Fe Garcia, Essential English 6 pp.190-191

Integrated English for Effective Communication 6 p. 300

J.A. Senn and Carol Ann Skinner, English Communication Skills in the New
Millennium. Texas: Barrett Kendall Publishing, 2001. P. C46, C110

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For inquiries or feedback, please write or call:

Department of Education, MIMAROPA Region – (CLMD)

Meralco Avenue corner St. Paul Road, Pasig City

Telephone Nos.: (02) 631-40-70; (02) 637-3093

Email Address: mimaropa.region@deped.gov.ph

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