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    The email requests the recipient to consider whether the company should establish an internship program and provide answers to several questions on the topic. It asks the recipient to carefully consider the questions and be prepared to discuss them at an upcoming management meeting. However, the email could be improved by having a more informative subject line, stating the main request upfront, including a deadline, avoiding empty words, and shortening the introduction.

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    [BC] Chapter 7_Exercise 7.1

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    The email requests the recipient to consider whether the company should establish an internship program and provide answers to several questions on the topic. It asks the recipient to carefully consider the questions and be prepared to discuss them at an upcoming management meeting. However, the email could be improved by having a more informative subject line, stating the main request upfront, including a deadline, avoiding empty words, and shortening the introduction.

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    The email requests the recipient to consider whether the company should establish an internship program and provide answers to several questions on the topic. It asks the recipient to carefully consider the questions and be prepared to discuss them at an upcoming management meeting. However, the email could be improved by having a more informative subject line, stating the main request upfront, including a deadline, avoiding empty words, and shortening the introduction.

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    7.1
    Weaknesses:
    - Meaningless subject line.
    - Not start directly, not state the main idea first
    - The request does not have a deadline and reason for it.
    - Empty words: in the morning
    - Cliches: another question that enters my mind
    - Long lead-ins: You may remember that
    To: Jackson Prewarski <jprewarski@polychron.com>
    From: Camille Montano <cmontano@polychron.com>
    Subject: Discuss about the internship program

    Hi, Jackson,

    As our organization continues to expand, I’m asking you to decide whether there should be an
    internship program in our management team here at Polychron.

    Please respond to the following questions regarding the internship program to help us decide if
    the program is necessary:
    ● What are the advantages and disadvantages to Polychron?
    ● What are some ramifications of hosting one here?
    ● Should we pay interns or they receive college credit instead?
    ● Should this program be launched in Polychron and in what department?

    Please give careful thought to these questions and be ready to discuss them at our
    management meeting September 22 at 9 a.m.

    Camilles
    [Full contact information]

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