The author's grandmother has always supported them no matter what others said and encouraged the author to follow their desires, such as studying philosophy despite their parents' objections. Although the grandmother lived in a society where women could not choose their studies, she was very determined and secretly trained as a nurse after her mother refused to let her study nursing. While the grandmother could not complete her studies after becoming pregnant with the author's father, she helped raise the author and has inspired them through her passion for plants, cooking, and determination.
The author's grandmother has always supported them no matter what others said and encouraged the author to follow their desires, such as studying philosophy despite their parents' objections. Although the grandmother lived in a society where women could not choose their studies, she was very determined and secretly trained as a nurse after her mother refused to let her study nursing. While the grandmother could not complete her studies after becoming pregnant with the author's father, she helped raise the author and has inspired them through her passion for plants, cooking, and determination.
The author's grandmother has always supported them no matter what others said and encouraged the author to follow their desires, such as studying philosophy despite their parents' objections. Although the grandmother lived in a society where women could not choose their studies, she was very determined and secretly trained as a nurse after her mother refused to let her study nursing. While the grandmother could not complete her studies after becoming pregnant with the author's father, she helped raise the author and has inspired them through her passion for plants, cooking, and determination.
The A person who I admired most is my grandmother.
I call her “lita” ,
a short for “abuelita”. She always supports me , no matter what other people say said . For example, when I decided to study philosophy and my parents were against that, she used to encourage me to follow my desire.
Unfortunately , she was born in a society w here women woman’s
could can not decide d what they want ed to study because they had to stay at home. However, she has never given give up easily in her his life, she is very determined. When she told her mother that she wanted to study nursing nursery and she refused, my grandmother managed to secretly practi s ce with a friend.
Anyway/Anyhow, After all she couldn't keep up with her studies
because she got pregnant of my dad. A few years later , when I was born , and she helped with my upbringing raise me . I have never met a more passionate person. She loves plants and she has an enormous garden with more than one hundred plants. She also loves cooking and she does it excellent ly! I think she has inspired me in so many ways , but mostly I believe that I inherited heritage her determination.
● CONTENT: quite relevant and developed.
● ORGANISATION AND COHESION: quite well organized and ideas flow quite well. Check linking devices ● RANGE AND ACCURACY: quite good use of grammar structures and vocabulary. However, there are some aspects that should be revised (see corrections) ● Score: 70%