part 1

The given pictures illustrate the proportion of learners who attended separate classes in an
education centre from 1985 to this year.

 Given is the chart illustrating….

Overall, upon analyzing the data, modern languages, fitness and dance had been dominating
the percentage of students in this education institution. Moreover, it seemed that children did not
prefer to join in cookery class.

To begin with, in 1985, the total percentage of fitness and dance, modern languages accounted
for approximately one and a half, respectively 22 percent, 24 percent. Besides, art occupied
17% in comparison with the proportion of local history and cookery which was almost the same
with art, respectively 15 percent. 14 percent. Compared with the rest of courses, music
appreciation just made up the smallest section of the total with only 8 percent.

 To begin with, in 1985, fitness and dance, as well as modern languages, accounted for
approximately 22 percent and 24 percent, respectively, making up nearly half of the total.
 In contrast, art occupied 17 percent, compared with the proportions of local history and
cookery, which were almost the same as art, at 15 percent and 14 percent respectively.

Lưu ý: respectively phải viết sau

Nowadays, the percentage of fitness and dance is stable with 22% compared with the slightly
decreasing of languages from 22% to 17%. Moreover, although cooking used to be lower than
art, the proportion of cooking increased from 14 percent to 19 percent. Notably, music
appreciation and local history have disappeared from education institution, meanwhile, IT
courses were added, with the highest proportion, 27%.

 Nowadays, the percentage for fitness and dance remains stable at 22 percent,
while the proportion for languages has slightly decreased from 24 percent to 17
percent. (Thì HTHT vì năm là “this year”)
 although cookery used to be less popular than art,

part 2

Working has been recognised and singled out in recent years as a matter of urgent public
concern. It is believed by some that the reason they work hard is to earn money and much has
been discussed about the validity of this argument. Personally, I tend to disagree with this point
of view.

 Regconized (check chính tả)

 Không nên dùng “they”. “They” chỉ sử dụng khi câu trước đã nhắc đến 1 chủ ngữ cụ thể
 It is believed by some that the reason they work hard is to earn money => It is argued
by some that the primary motivation for diligent work is financial gain

On the one hand. I understand why some individuals think the aforementioned notion is justified
to some extent. To begin with, the economy is important for human life. In modern life , money
can be used to buy any type of goods. Additionally, in a slum, for a typical family, a man is the
breadwinner, so he needs to solve the economic burden. In this case, money is the most
important element because his children need money to pay for their tuition, his wife needs
money to cook a meal. Nevertheless, in modern life, if people just w

 the economy is important for human life => the economy is of paramount importance for
human existence
 In modern life , money can be used to buy any type of goods => In contemporary
society, money serves as a universal medium for the acquisition of various goods.

On the one hand, as far as I am concerned, there are more convincing reasons to argue
otherwise. First of all, because of the stress of economic burden, the work performance will be
terrible. In big cities, there are many job opportunities so that people can choose the job which
makes their living and suitable for them. The suitable work means people feel happy when they
do their job, it leads to people performing amazing work. Moreover, because of the responsibility
to the community, some people work so hard. For example, volunteering organizations, people
who work for them do not have salaries but they still do their best to better a society. On top of
that, some people work for their noble ideals, a typical billionaire. Now, the most wealthy person
is Ellon Musk, because of his desire to explore the universe , he works every time and sleeps 4
to 6 hours per day.

 First of all, because of the stress of economic burden, the work performance will be
terrible => Firstly, the strain of financial obligations can have dire consequences on work
performance

 Now, the most wealthy person is Ellon Musk, because of his desire to explore the
universe , he works every time and sleeps 4 to 6 hours per day. => Currently, Elon Musk
is the wealthiest individual, driven by his ambition to explore the universe. This pursuit
leads him to work extensively, typically sleeping only four to six hours daily