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A Visit to the Zoo by the English Language Society 2016

The English Language Society of SMK Ahmad had made a visit to zoo for
the annual activity. A total of 50 members and four teachers involved in this trip. The
main objectives for this trip was to promote awareness of endangered animals in the
wild. We did many things there such as sightseeing around the zoo, drawing
competition and treasure hunt.
Cik Suraya one of our advisors taken the attendance at the school
compound by eight on the morning. We boarded the bus with two teachers each
buses to supervise the members. We arrived at the zoo at 9 a.m. We tour around the
zoo for one hour from 9 a.m. to 10 a.m. We found my unique and rarely found animal
like panda. It's such a worth sightseeing.
Next, we gathered in front of zoo lake for the drawing picture competition.
We given one hour to finish the drawing. The attractive privet will be given to the
winner. It's made us more participated to do our best. By 11 a.m. we started the
treasure hunt. We were divided to few groups. Everyone do their best in seeking the
treasure. It took one hour to find all the treasure.
After that, we had our lunch break. We were served with many foods that had
been prepared by the zoo workers. We had the prize ceremony after done eating.
Two student from lower forms and one student from upper forms won the prize.we
departed at 1 p.m. It was an enjoyable and unforgettable trip.
The society wanted to thanks to our advisors and the zoo workers for their
support and guidance. The society would also like to express appreciation to all
people that involved in this trip.
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The corrected essay:

A Visit to the Zoo by the English Language Society 2014

The English Language Society of SMK Ahmad had made a visit to
the zoo for the annual activity. A total of 50 members and four teachers
were involved in this trip. The main objectives objective for this trip
was to promote awareness of the endangered animals in the wild. We did
many things there such as sightseeing around the zoo, and taking part
in the drawing competition and treasure hunt.
Cik Suraya, one of our advisors, taken took the attendance at
the school compound by eight on in the morning. We boarded the bus
with two teachers accompanying each buses bus to supervise the
members. We arrived at the zoo at 9 a.m. We tour toured around the zoo
for one hour from 9 a.m. to 10 a.m. We found my many unique and rarely
found animals like pandas. It's It was such a worth sightseeing.
Next, we gathered in front of the zoo lake for the drawing picture
competition. We were given one hour to finish the drawing. The attractive
privet will be given to the winner. It's made us more participated to
do our best. We were eager to participate in the competition and
did our best. By 11 a.m. we started the treasure hunt. We were divided
into a few groups. Everyone do did their best in seeking the treasure. It
took one hour to find all the treasure.
After that, we had our lunch break. We were served with many
foods that had been prepared by the zoo workers. We had the prize
giving ceremony after done eating. Two students from the lower forms
and one student from the upper forms form won the prize. we We
departed at 1 p.m. It was an enjoyable and unforgettable trip.
The society wanted to thanks to thank our advisors and the zoo
workers for their support and guidance. The society would also like to
express our appreciation to all people that who were involved in this
trip.

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Anonymous,
The Secretary of The English Language Society,
SMK Ahmad