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Task 5: Study the following sentences to see how each segment (base on Task 4) is written.
The pie chart illustrates results of a survey about what Japanese people over 30 reported made
them most happy.

The largest proportion is achievement at work, which is responsible for 32%.

Achievement at work is responsible for 32% of the total, by far the largest proportion.

The second largest proportion is doing hobbies, which accounts for 24%.
Doing hobbies accounts for 24%, which is the second largest proportion.
Doing hobbies ranks second, which accounts for 24%.
Second comes doing hobbies, which accounts for 24%.

Financial security makes up 20%.

Financial security ranks third, which makes up 20%
Third comes financial security, which makes up 20%.

Second and third come doing hobbies and financial security, which account for 24% and 20%
respectively.

Being with family ranks fourth, which contributes 14% to the total.
Fourth comes being with family, which contributes 14% to the total.

While/Whereas financial security makes up 20%, being with family contributes 14% to the total.
Financial security makes up 20% while/whereas being with family contributes 14% to the total.

The remaining 10% comes from other factors.

Other factors are responsible for the remaining 19%
The smallest proportion is other factors, which is responsible for the remaining 10 percent.

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Task 6: Read the following paragraphs describing the pie chart in Task 4. Improve the
paragraphs where appropriate.

Version A

The pie chart illustrates results of a survey about what Japanese people over 30 reported

made them most happy. According to the chart, the largest proportion is achievement at work,

which is responsible for 32%., by far the largest proportion. The second comes doing hobbies,

which account for 24%. Whereas financial security ranks third, which makes up 20%, fourth comes

being with family, contributes 14% to the total. The smallest proportion dealt with other factors,

which is responsible for the remaining 10 percent.

Version B

The pie chart illustrates results of a survey about what Japanese people over 30 reported

made them most happy. According to the graph, achievement at work is responsible for 32%, by

far the largest proportion. Whereas second and third come doing hobbies and financial security,

which account for 24% and 20% respectively, being with family ranks fourth, which contributes

14% to the total. Other factors are remaining, which are responsible for 10 percent.