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WP1: Genre Conventions

Text from my initial A comment or The change(s) I How this change
WP submission: question I received made to what I impacts my paper:
(from initially wrote:
whom/where?)

“Although these Allison: “The paper’s “As different A better thesis helped
peer-reviewed studies thesis is short and academic disciplines the overall structure
differ in discipline lacks conventions” approach the same of the paper
and the structure they topic of
use to uphold their homelessness, a
argument, they distinct style is
coincide in the same apparent in each
alarming issue that article’s argument,
our country faces, the use of evidence,
epidemic of intended audience,
homelessness. “ and organization of
information. “

“One apparent Allison: “Is structure “ a distinct style is Focused on the

difference between the only convention apparent in each authors argument,
the two articles is you’ll discuss in the article’s argument, intended audience
how their evidence is paper?” differing in the use of and the organization
presented.” evidence, intended of information as well
audience, and as the structure.
organization of
information.”

Did not address the Allison: “Does not “Economic and By addressing the
guiding question address the prompt’s psychological different conventions,
guiding question: disciplines follow I was able to
what do different different genre understand how the
conventions tell us conventions that disciplines truly
about the disciplines ultimately affect differed.
and their discourse every aspect of
communities?” academic writing”

“The authors of “The Allison: “The body “Quigley and Adding more analysis
Economics of mostly seems to be Raphael used a helped balance out all
Homelessness” observations, but they mixture of primary of the observations
need to go further and secondary which helped create a
initially use data in
into analysis.” sources to create a stronger argument.
forms of figures and convincing argument,
tables to test a but with the
previous hypothesis assumption that the
audience is
regarding the rising
knowledgeable on
of homelessness.” economic sources.”

Referenced to the Allison: “Why do “The author assumes By explaining the

entire paper differences matter?” that the audience is differences it allows
well educated, and the reader to
most likely experts in understand how
the same field. As a disciplines affect an
consequence, the approach to a topic.
discoveries that lie
within the economic
paper may not reach
to many people
outside of the
targeted audience.”

Referenced to the Allison:“What do “Despite the fact that The purpose of

entire paper these differences tell their structures explaining the
us about the differed, both authors differences greater
disciplines?” use a formal tone in defines the genre
their writing. A conventions
scholarly and
objective tone
appropriately follows
the genre conventions
of both disciplines.”

The entire body Allison:“Stylistic Used paraphrasing Integrating quotes

paragraph about issues… want to instead of quotes into the grammar
evidence integrate quotes into provides for a
the grammar of our seamless transition.
sentences”

“At the bottom of the Allison: “Supposed to Converted them all to Using the right
income distribution, use Chicago-style chicago style citations is important
individual consumers footnotes, not in-text footnotes. in an academic paper.
must choose between parenthetical
the minimum quality citations.”
of housing available
and homelessness.”
(Quibly & Raphael
pg 329)
WP2: Genre Translation
Text from my initial A comment or The change(s) I How this change
WP submission: question I received made to what I impacts my paper:
(from initially wrote:
whom/where?)

WP2: comic strip Allison: “Wondering Added more text This helps the reader
if it is possible to bubbles to the comic see the effects the
express the effects strip. music had on the
music had on people participant.
through images
more?”

WP2: I did not Allison: “Curious to “...I decided to use a Adding a couple
mention how I how you created the digital note taking app sentences addressing
created the comic images” that I have been using how I made my
strip. for my lecture notes. I comic strip helps
learned through trial create a better overall
and error and quickly understanding of the
discovered how to genre translation
make straight lines and process.
text boxes. I went
online and searched up
images of cartoon
people and replicated
them to the best of my
abilities.”

WP2: structure of the Allison: “Need to “McCarty’s research This focuses the
two genre expand on what the paper uses objective paper on genre
translations. conventions of and complex conventions and not
comics are” language that can be the sole comparison
intimidating to people of genres
outside of the
intended discourse
community.”

WP2: Allison: “What are “I found some I didn’t need 3

In my first WP2, I did three examples of inspiration from Scott examples of comics,
not mention any comics that you McCloud’s, “Making but McCloud’s source
examples of comics. looked at and how Comics” comic book. helped me understand
did they help you a comic strip’s
 understand the genre Using his successful conventions.
and its conventions?” method of
communication,
McCloud uses a comic
strip to demonstrate
how to “write with
pictures”.”

WP2: beginning and Allison: “Could be “The advantage that Helps tie the
end of paragraphs helped by having comes with more paragraphs together.
transitions within relaxed genre
paragraphs when conventions, is the
move from discussion opportunity to reach a
of the academic variety of new
article’s conventions discourse
to those of a comic” communities”

WP2: Citations Allison:“Supposed to Replaced in-text Uses the correct form

cite using parenthetical citations of citation.
Chicago-style with chicago-style
footnotes, not in-text footnotes.
parenthetical
citations”

WP2: “Changing the Allison: “Expand on “Translating I revised the thesis to

formality of a genre, conventions” McCarty’s research focus more on genre
such as translating an paper into a comic conventions.
academic article into strip brings forth new
a comic strip, comes conventions that
with advantages such affect the structure
as a wider intended and language
audience and an formality, and allows
easier comprehension for a wider intended
of the experiment, but audience.”
can also be faced
with constraints such
as limited details or
evidence.”