A comment or

Text from my initial The change(s) I made to what I How this change impacts
question I received
WP submission: initially wrote: my paper:
(from whom/where?)
Through their differences in
purpose of writing, choice of
evidence, intended audience and It helps to establish the
Allison: There is no
1. WP1: jargon, as well as the organization thesis of a genre analysis
thesis in the
introduction as a whole, these two articles essay, instead of just
introduction paragraph
illustrate the particular genre conclude the themes of the
– just a series of facts.
conventions of their academic two articles selected.
disciplines and the scholarly
communities they create.
With the footnotes in
e.g., Meyer, I. (1995). Minority
2. WP1: footnotes Allison: The footnotes properly presented, the
Stress and Mental Health in Gay
and bibliography and bibliography are article conforms to the
Men. Journal of Health and Social
missing. format required of a Chicago
Behavior, 36(1), 38-56: 15
style paper.
Allison: What do the e.g., Such narrative approach
The change demonstrates in
differences in the genre therefore offers an emic
detail how this gay men
3. WP1: body conventions tell us perspective and examines choices
community article differs
paragraphs about the academic or thought processes of individuals
from other urban studies
disciplines and the involved, which is often ignored in
articles in its narrative style
discourse communities other academic articles from the
and the effect it achieves.
they are a part of? urban studies discipline.
e.g., While some researchers
attribute the stressful mental state
of homosexual people to their
Evidence with cites from the
Allison: This is a lack social-economic status, the author
originally article helps my
of evidence to support intends to dispute their societal
4. WP1: body analysis to more specifically
the claims made in the reaction theory by suggesting a
paragraphs illustrate aba analyze the
paper. Whole modified approach that “specifies
difference in the
paragraphs seem to lack causal relationships based on
methodology the author
quotes. theoretical conceptualizations”
adopts in his research,
and “examine the differential
effect of minority stress on
minority members.”
5. WP1: body Allison: The majority This provides vivid evidence that Details help to make the
paragraphs of the body paragraphs more and more gay people are genre analysis more concrete
are summative. turning to “neighborhood-based” and specific, so I add more
bars which are mixed and “gay- details and cites in the
friendly” from traditional gay bars. revision.
Having individual gay men talk
about their daily experience
effectively reflects their increasing
need for social mobility, an
abstract concept which is likely to
be too obscure and general for
readers to understand without
 explanations.
Carl’s statement directly presents
what gay people of ethnic minority
think and how they make certain
decisions in social interactions. Details help to make the
6. WP1: body Allison: The majority Such narrative approach therefore genre analysis more concrete
paragraphs of the body paragraphs offers an emic perspective and and specific, so I add more
are summative. examines choices or thought details and cites in the
processes of individuals involved, revision.
which is often ignored in other
academic articles from the urban
studies discipline.
The change of the sequence
I modified the structure of my
7. WP1: structure Didn’t receive a makes the essay flow more
WP1 by switching the order of the
comment fluently in logic and be more
main paragraphs.
concrete in content.
Allison: It’s not
apparent from reading I modified the format of my These changes make my
the translation what translation by changing its layout translation more readable to
8. WP2: translation
genre it belongs to. as well as font and style to visually ordinary readers as Quora
Consider what a Quora mimic what a typical Quora uses instead of academic
answer visually looks answer webpage looks like. audience.
like-the website itself.
I added languages that try to build
Allison: The answer a conversation with the question The article is more like a
read more like a such as “I think it well address Quora answer, and the tone
9. WP2: translation
summary than an your question” and “I think it’s is more like everyday
answer to the specific quite consistent with your doubt”. conversation instead of
question posed. I also added a brief self- academic address.
introduction.
Instead of briefly mentioning
The answer is made less
10. WP2: translation Didn’t receive a Lewis’ methodology, I
formal and the viewers can
comment. summarized his article’s main idea
instantly get the main idea.
in one sentence.
The answer is made less
11. WP2: translation Didn’t receive a I deleted the part explaining the
confusing for having to
comment. canary metaphor.
comprehend a new concept.
12. WP2: translation Should use proper
I modified the citation.
Chicago-style citation.
13. WP2: translation Allison: The purpose of I explained the source and The maps are better related
the maps is not clear significance of them. to the text.
14. WP2: Allison: Cannot tell
metacognitive whether it’s the I used “the translated text” to refer It is clearer which text I am
reflection academic article or your to my translation referring to.
translation.
15. WP2: Allison: Need to I attached screenshots of two
metacognitive provide 3 examples of examples of Quora answer to the
reflection
the new genre. appendix.