Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as the older

houses in the local area. Others disagree and say local authorities should allow people
to build houses in the style of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your
opinion.

It has been reckoned by various people that (fluffy language, use active voice) new
residential buildings ought to be constructed in the same manner as the older ones in
the locality; however,  while some sections of society argue that the government should
give provide( weak verb) relaxation to the owners in choosing the design of the house to
the owners. In my point of view, (Redundant, no need) I completely accord with lateral
statement the latter statement.

To embark on, building a house similar to the traditional houses have has a certain
long-term benefits. Firstly, the owner would not to have shoulder a the burden of
selecting a design of the building. Furthermore, the look-alike pattern of construction
gives is more likely to give an incredible view to the society. In addition, the matching
structure of houses shows the unity and togetherness among the local residents.

Needless to say, the right to choose the layout of the houses always bring brings a
sence sense of immense satisfaction to the owners. It has been suspected that the
worth and demand of property is are often higher for the buildings that are designed and
selected by the choice of owners. For instance, according to certain real estate advisors
in the U.K, the exorbitant prices of newly built houses in the city centre frequently raise
the demand among the citizens(must be “buyers”), especially the affluent class,
because of advanced build-up facilities in the buildings compared to the old
conventional houses.

To conclude, I firmly briefly reiterate that building the a house with the choice of an/the
owner is certainly seen as a boon rather than a bane to the society as it not only fulfills
the needs of the individuals but also gives them sense of satisfaction.
it fulfills the needs of individuals. In addition, it also gives a sense of satisfaction to the
people. 

Overall = 6.35
TA= 6
Answer all parts of the question
Addressed quite a lot
Present relevant ideas
yes
Fully explain these ideas
First view was not fully developed
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Support was missing for one paragraph
LR = 7
Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
-yes , Ex- look-alike, matching patterns, similar style
Use less common question specific words that
accurately convey meaning
Yes , building designs, real estate advisors, construct
spelling and word formation mistakes
hardly any

GRA 6.5 CC 6 – 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Rare variety Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
Errors in sentence Almost logical
A fewer One main idea per paragraph
Mix of simple and complex\makecomplex+ No, multiple ideas- bad for higher scores
compound sentences too Included an introduction and conclusion
Yes
Support main points with an explanation and then an
example
Somewhat missing
Use cohesive linking words accurately and
appropriately
In some cases poor understanding
Varied your linking phrases using synonyms
Some rare areas to improve