NAME : Naufal Fajar Gumati

CLASS : XII IPA 3

Practice: Distinguishing application letter

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1|N a uf al F aj ar G uma ti ( 2 3)
XII IPA 3
 Points to distinguish: Application letter 1
a.Social functions To apply scholarship in computer
studies of Copperbelt University
in Zambia.
b.Opening salutation Dear Sir/Madam :
c.paragraph 1 Mentioning from where and
when she got the information
about the scholarship.
d.paragraph 2 Mentioning her last education in
University of Zimbabwe and how
she got a good grade in her study.
e.paragraph 3 Mentioning a little information
about her abilities like that she’s
a hardworking serious person
and a person that can work in a
team.
f.paragraph 4 Mentioning a few question that
she’s been curious about.
g. Closing Salutation Your faithfully,
Aggie Zulu
Your personal I think this application is not
opinion formal and the language features
is doesn’t polite at all. The
questions she mentioning in the
last paragraph is unnecessary on
a Application letter.
And I think her application will
not be accepeted at all.
Give your recommendation :
She should fix her language
features in her application letter
to become more polite so the
letter will look as a formal one.
Also she shoul change the last
paragraph to part where she
attached her resume/curriculum
vitae/ any document needed.
2|N a uf al F aj ar G uma ti ( 2 3)
XII IPA 3
Application letter 2
To apply for a job as a
administrative assistant in Mr. Smith
Portland Office.
Dear Mr. Smith,
Mentioning from whose she got the
information about the opening job as
a administrative assistant.
Mentioning her experience working
as an administrative assistant in
Beauty Corp and also describe about
her skills.
Mentioning that she already attached
her resume for the considered by Mr.
Smith
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Sincerely,
Elizabeth Johnson
In my opinion this application letter
is good and perfect. Every sentences
is delivered effectively also efficient.
Also the language features is correct
and sound really formal and
professional. The minus point of this
application is that she didn’t
mentioning anything about her
identity.
I think, Mr. Smith will interested to
recruit her after he seen her
application letter.
Give your recommendation :
Add your identity in your
application letter because it will help
the receiver to knows you better.