Class code: ABC

Student’s name: DEF

Peer editor’s name: JHI
Date: DD-MM-YYYY

WRITING ASSIGNMENT – LESSON 3

Unit: 5
Topic:

Some people think that parents have a great influence on their children. Others believe that the
media is a bigger influence.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 1st draft

Many people claim that parents have a great influence on their children. Most of us have
spend a lot of time to stay with our parents during childhood to adolencense, so part of our
personality, habits, way of thinking, and expression is often the same as theirs. But that's not
all. So the following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.
 
There are many other things that will affect our cognitive process, and media is one of the
biggest. In my opinion, nowadays, young children tend to exposure with media the way too
much. That why the influence of media into young children is inevitable. Despite the fact that
children are staying with their parents, but their personalities still reflect what they are
absorb online. If parents take time to scan all the news or games, entertain information that
their children see and play everyday, it will less bad-affected. But if not, the children who
have been affect by bad media everyday will turn to unpredictable consequences.

 Self-assessment (checklist)

Content SELF-
ASSESSMENT
Task Response  

Is the essay at least 250 words?  

Is the topic identified in the introduction?  
Does the thesis statement discuss both views as being asked?  
Is each paragraph related to the topic?  
Does the conclusion summarize both views and state the writer’s opinion?  
Coherence & Cohesion  

Are there one introduction, two body paragraphs, and one conclusion in the  
essay?
Is there a clear topic sentence in each paragraph?  
Are relevant examples and/or other supporting details (explanation, reasons,  
…) included?
Are the sentences well linked together using appropriate cohesive devices?  
Lexical Resource  

Has the question been suitably paraphrased?  

Has consistent repetition of vocabulary been avoided?  
Have spelling and word-choice errors been checked?  
Is there sufficient use of academic vocabulary?  
Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to the topic?  
Grammar Range and Accuracy  

Has a range of simple, compound, and complex sentences been used?  

Have the verb tenses and subject-verb agreement been checked?  
Are most sentences error-free?  
Has correct punctuation been used?  

 Peer assessment (checklist)

Content PEER Comments/

ASSESSMENT Suggestions
Task Response    

Is the essay at least 250 words?

Is the topic identified in the introduction?  
Does the thesis statement discuss both views as    
being asked?
Is each paragraph related to the topic?  
Does the conclusion summarize both views and  
state the writer’s opinion?
Coherence & Cohesion  

Are there one introduction, two body paragraphs,  

and one conclusion in the essay?
Is there a clear topic sentence in each  
paragraph?
Are relevant examples and/or other supporting  
details (explanation, reasons, …) included?
Are the sentences well linked together using  
appropriate cohesive devices?
Lexical Resource  

Has the question been suitably paraphrased?  

Has consistent repetition of vocabulary been  
avoided?
Have spelling and word-choice errors been  
checked?
Is there sufficient use of academic vocabulary?  
Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to  
the topic?
Grammar Range and Accuracy  

Has a range of simple, compound, and complex  

sentences been used?
Have the verb tenses and subject-verb  
agreement been checked?
Are most sentences error-free?  
Has correct punctuation been used?    

 Final version

Many people claim that parents have a great influence on their children. Most of us have
spend a lot of time to stay with our parents during childhood to adolencense, so part of our
personality, habits, way of thinking, and expression is often the same as theirs. But that's not
all. So the following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.
 
There are many other things that will affect our cognitive process, and media is one of the
biggest. In my opinion, nowadays, young children tend to exposure with media the way too
much. That why the influence of media into young children is inevitable. Despite the fact that
children are staying with their parents, but their personalities still reflect what they are
absorb online. If parents take time to scan all the news or games, entertain information that
their children see and play everyday, it will less bad-affected. But if not, the children who
have been affect by bad media everyday will turn to unpredictable consequences.
 
Weighing up both sides of the argument, I think the media will have more of an impact on
children's development. While parent's influence is still important, it is inevitable in this
modern days.

 Rubric for grading

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