Class code:

Student’s name:PHAM VU PHUONG QUYNH

Peer editor’s name:LE THAI HAI
Date:18/10

WRITING ASSIGNMENT – LESSON ___

Unit:
Topic:

Some people believe that the best way to improve the general well-being of school children
is to make physical education compulsory in all schools. Others, however, think that this
would have little effect on overall health and other measures are needed.

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 Self-assessment (checklist)

 Peer assessment (checklist)

 Final version

Nowadays, children's health has become a big problem. On this issue, two opinions have been
proposed, the first one adding PE class in all schools while while others think that there are
other measures can be used. This essay will discuss both views with detailed explanations.
First of all, doing exercise can increase not just students’s physical health but also mental help.
Some research has shown that people who exercise regularly have better mental health and
emotional wellbeing, and lower rates of mental illness. If schools have a compulsory gym
classes, children do not have to spend extra hours for exercising.
But every coin has two sides, despite mentioned earlier that exercise is needed for children,
they can just move their bodies outside their classes. Team sport is not fair to everyone,
because a lot of competitive sport depend on player’s physical condition, for example in
basketball player have height get more advantage. Because of this unfairness, student could
hate attend PE class.
In conclusion, PE class could bring a lot of benefit. But in my point of view, children should have
rights to make their own decisions wheter or not to attend PE class. Sport should be a fun thing
to do not the oposite.
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Content Y/N Comments/ Suggestions
Task Response
Does the essay contain at least 250 words? y
Is the topic addressed in the introduction? y
Does the thesis statement discuss both questions
y
as required?
Is each of the paragraphs related to the topic? y
Does the conclusion summarize the both views
y
and give the author’s final opinion?
Coherence & Cohesion
Does the essay have an introduction, two body
y
paragraphs, and a conclusion?
Is there a clear topic sentence in each paragraph? y
Does the author include any relevant examples
and/or other supporting details (explanation, y
reasons, etc.)?
Are there at least 4 transitional expressions used
y
correctly (First, Moreover, However, etc.)?
Lexical Resource
Has the question been paraphrased properly? y
Does the author avoid repeating vocabulary? n
Have spelling and word-choice errors been
y
checked?
Does the author use academic vocabulary
y
sufficiently?

Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to the n

topic?
Grammar Range and Accuracy
Does the author use a range of simple,
y
compound, and complex sentences?
Have the verb tenses and subject-verb
y
agreement been checked?
Has punctuation been used correctly? y
Time management
Was the task completed within 40 minutes? n
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