Peer Feedback: Rough Draft

1. Who are you giving feedback to?

Maya Sugihara

2. Read the paper that has been assigned to you.

a. While you read, take notes in the boxes below. Include the following:
i. What the author does well in each section
ii. What the author needs to keep working on (and how they could make it better)
iii. Keep your feedback constructive and respectful!

Title Abstract
- Meets expectations N/A for this report

Introduction Methods
- Good background information N/A for this report
- Some grammatical errors
- Add information relating to the locations

Results Discussion
- Fine overall - What has been written is mostly fine
- Needs more information on the Tukey Test - Needs information on probable causes of the
and box-and-whiskers plot trend seen
- State whether the hypothesis is supported or
not
- Add potential flaws in the experiment
- Explain how the information from the report
can be used
- Include potential future studies
- Would recommend finishing it

Works Cited Figures

- Looks fine - Would clarify what exactly is happening in
each figure
- Overall fine
- Finish the caption for Figure 4

General formatting & style

- More formal
- Bit more depth for the topics mentioned
- Otherwise seems good

3. Assess the paper’s overall performance on the competencies you will be graded on
Competency Associated Yes, Significant Progress, or Not Yet
sections Explain your choice with evidence

Sufficient Evidence Introduction & Significant Progress

I incorporate sufficient evidence and Discussion - While the Introduction makes good use
examples. of evidence and examples, the
Discussion is unfinished

Interpret Patterns Results Significant Progress

I interpret patterns and explore - While the interpretation of the ANOVA
relationships. test was up to requirements, the Tukey
Test and box-and-whiskers plot should
also be interpreted.

Create Representation Graphs & Significant Progress

I create a clear written, verbal, or visual Figures - While the figures were fine, a bit more
representation of my understanding clarity in the captions and on what
exactly is occurring would allow for
better understanding

Valid Sources Introduction, Significant Progress

I use valid sources or data. Discussion, & - While sources are cited and used in the
Works Cited Introduction and Discussion, some of
the sources could be considered
questionable

Standard Conventions Entire Report Significant Progress

I use standard conventions of a - While standard conventions are used,
discipline to enhance the some parts are insufficiently formal, and
communication. both the Discussion and Figures are
incomplete.

4. Share this document with your partner so they can see your feedback and thoughts

5. Based on this paper (and the other samples we’ve already looked at), reflect on the following:
a. How can you use what you have seen in these papers to improve YOUR writing?
i. Note: There is always something you can improve!

A few extra figures that reference otherwise unknown information would add to the clarity of
my report.

b. What specifically do you still need to work on for your project?

The refining of the Discussion and Introduction is still, in the vaguest sense, a work in
progress, and the References require some mild expansion.