“Peer Review” Essay 1

Original Questions

 Is the punctuation accurate?

 Did I miss anything in my essay, or does it overall seem good?

 Is MLA format good?

 Any suggestions on revising or editing?

 Does each paragraph structure flow to the corresponding paragraph is correctly suited

with each other?

Classmate comments

 There are no MLA errors, but I would correct the spacing that is between page 5 and 6
your works cited page is spaced downward too much.

 The titles of the articles should be in italics and just make sure to have the correct spacing
and indentations.

 Yes, your essay is understandable enough to read.

 You should remove any words that are in first person for example, the word “my” in your
method paragraph I would also say to expand on your results paragraph include any
changes that were seen in the experiment besides that I say your essay is good.

 You can improve your grammar errors by correcting all of the extra spacing throughout
your essay.

Professor’s Comments

 Rework methods section to clarify what is being tested in the experiment.

 Rework results section to break up long paragraph into shorter paragraphs that chunk
information more accessibly for readers.

 Rework discussion section also to break up long paragraph into shorter paragraphs that
chunk information more accessibly for readers.
 Revise with special attention to common grammatical mistakes, run-on sentences and
fragments.