By : LoveLEE

The Beauty of
Cultural
Diversity
IELTS BAND 9 ESSAY
"Countries become more developed
due to mix of different people and
their culture.

Do you agree or disagree?"

 INTRODUCTION
In this era of globalization, few
countries are left from extensive mixing
of people and their cultures.

Countries are becoming mere political

regions and nations, reminder of bygone
traditions.

I believe this is happening clearly for

the better.
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The most beneficial contribution of population
mixing is perhaps the complimenting of
peoples, which encounter and fuse with each
other, for mutual development.

When people cross borders, they carry their

ideas, knowledge and skills and let them blend
with those of others.

The compound is ideally beneficial because

people generally take up and sustain what is
good for them.

For this blending of knowledge and ideas,

today’s world is much more convenient and
harmonious than it was less than a century ago.
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Enhancement of society, which is done easiest
through blending of people, also has to be stated.

A country may be conservative and grow financially,

but today development is a socio-economic affair.

This means that societies and countries do not

develop merely by increasing monetary wealth

but must also grow through the improvement of

their people, which is done through “curing people
by people.”
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Detractors of such opinion say that we’re losing
our cultural and national identities as more and
more exotic ideas, values and customs are being
domesticated.

This perhaps does have a factual base since

blending of cultures definitely modifies customs.
But such modification can hardly be called loss.

Identities are made of long time traditions, which

were “grown” somewhere back in time,by possibly
by the process of taking up newer identities or
augmenting the already cherished ones.

It is foolish, therefore, to be critical of mixing of

people and culture, at least in this way.
CONCLUSION
Hence, I conclude that mixing of
people and their cultures,

despite its critics and occasional

blemishes,

is taking the whole world to a

better place.
“The beauty of the world lies in the
diversity of its people.”