In today's modern era, young adults are often criticized for leading a protected and pampered

life. Many people believe that young adults do not have the challenges of life. While some may
argue that young adults have it easy, I believe that they face many challenges that are unique
to their generation. I disagree with the statement as I believe that young adults today face
struggles and challenges like pressure to succeed and higher cost of living which ultimately
make them more educated and resilient. (This is a statement which should be included in
your introduction as it tells the examiner a general overview of what will be discussed in
the essay. Although discursive essay does not require a stand, putting it will make your
essay more detail and specific.)

One of the biggest challenges that young adults face is the pressure to succeed in a rapidly
changing world. With the advent of technology, the job market has become more competitive,
and young adults are often required to possess a wide range of skills in order to succeed. This
pressure can be overwhelming, and many young adults struggle with stress and anxiety. (Give
ONE example of a job that requires wide range of skills and relate it to the pressure to succeed.
One will do)

Another challenge that young adults face is the high cost of living. The cost of education,
housing, and healthcare has skyrocketed in recent years, leaving many young adults struggling
to make ends meet. This financial strain can lead to feelings of uncertainty and insecurity about
the future. (Can elaborate more on HOW. How the financial problem leads to insecurity for
example then give one appropriate example if possible)

Despite these challenges, I believe that young adults possess many survival skills that are often
overlooked. Young adults today are more educated and informed than ever before. They have
access to a wealth of knowledge through the internet, and they are able to connect with people
from all over the world. This level of connectivity has led to a more diverse and open-minded
generation. (Give one example)

Furthermore, young adults today are more resilient than ever before. They have grown up in a
world that is constantly changing, and they have adapted to these changes with ease. They are
able to think critically and creatively, and they are not afraid to take risks and try new things.

In conclusion, I believe that the comment that young adults lack survival skills is misguided.
While they may face unique challenges, they possess many valuable skills that will serve them
well in the future. It is important to recognize and appreciate the strengths of this generation,
and to support them as they navigate the complexities of life.

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