Report Card

Lesson: Medicine Practice Test 3: ASSESSMENT

Score
#3
Student Name: Juliana Porto

Email Address: juliananesiporto@gmail.com

56/63
Your Response
28/01/2021

Dr Jan Walker
Pulmonologist
Epstein Clinic
393 Victorian Road
Richmond

Dear Dr Walker,

Re: Ms Susan Forrest, DOB 19/05/1957

I am referring Ms Susan Forrest into your care for further assessment and evaluation regarding her asthma.

Ms Forrest presented on 25/02/19 consultation with a 2-day history of shortness of breath associated with persistent cough
for 7 days, which demanded a more frequent use of Ventolin. Her PEF was 330 in the ocasion and a CXR and FBC were
ordered.

On review two days after, Ms Forrest reported worsening of the shortness of breath and fatigue. Her temperature was
37,5°C, PEF was 200 and the CXR revealed consolidation in the right lung. The FBC is in processing and a CT scan was
ordered for definitive diagnosis.

Please note that Ms Forrest is an active woman who has asthma since 4 years old. She is a smoker for 7 years, has
allergic rhinitis and eczema, for which she takes Ventolin, Symbicort twice a day, Zyritec and topical hydrocortisone as
required.

It would be appreciated if you could assess Ms Forrest and evaluate for a probable community-acquired pneumonia. There
is also need to review her medications and dosages in addiction to reiforce smoking cessation options.

Please contact me should you have any queries.

Yours sinceraly,

Doctor.
Teacher’s Corrections
28/01/2021

Dr Jan Walker

Pulmonologist

Epstein Clinic

393 Victorian Road

Richmond

Dear Dr Walker,

Re: Ms Susan Forrest, DOB 19/05/1957

I am referring Ms Susan Forrest into your care for further assessment and evaluation regarding her asthma.

Ms Forrest presented on 25/02/19 consultation with a 2-day history of shortness of breath associated with persistent cough
for 7 days, which demanded a more frequent use of Ventolin. Her PEF was 330 in the ocasion and a CXR and FBC were
ordered.

On review two days after, Ms Forrest reported worsening of the shortness of breath and fatigue. Her temperature was
37,5°C, PEF was 200 and the CXR revealed consolidation in the right lung. The FBC is in processing and a CT scan was
ordered for definitive diagnosis.

Please note that Ms Forrest is an active woman who has asthma since 4 years old. She V is a smoker for 7 years, has
allergic rhinitis and eczema, for which she takes Ventolin, Symbicort twice a day, Zyritec and topical hydrocortisone as
required.

It would be appreciated if you could assess Ms Forrest and evaluate for a probable community-acquired pneumonia. There
is also need to review her medications and dosages in SP addiction to WF reiforce smoking cessation options.

Please contact me should ^^ you have any queries.

Yours SP sinceraly,

Doctor.
Correction Code
Please use the code below to fix specific grammatical / vocabulary errors in your writing. It’s up to you to fix the errors we
have identified. It’s the best way to quickly improve.

NOUNS PUNCTUATION
+S = add s to noun P = check punctuation
-S = delete s from noun
WORD CHOICE
PREPOSITIONS WC = wrong word choice
PREP = wrong preposition
WORD FORM
ARTICLES WF = word form
A / AN / THE = add article
-a / -an / -the = delete article WORD ORDER
WO = word order/sentence structure
VERBS
V = verb error MISSING WORD
+S = add s to he/she/it verbS ^ = missing word

SPELLING IRRELEVANT CASE NOTE/S

SP = check spelling IRR = irrelevant case note/s

Score Details
1) Purpose
1A) The purpose of your letter is immediately apparent High / Medium / Low
1B) The purpose of your letter is sufficiently expanded High / Medium / Low

Comments
1A) Very clear.

1B) Well managed.

2) Content
2A) The content of your letter is appropriate to the intended reader High / Medium / Low
2B) The content of your letter addresses what is needed to continue care High / Medium / Low
2C) The content of your letter accurately represents the case notes High / Medium / Low

Comments
2A) Great. You wrote the letter with the recipient in mind.

2B) Clear.

2C) Accurate interpretation.

3) Conciseness and Clarity

3A) The length of your letter is appropriate to the case and reader (you only included relevant information; you did not
exclude any important information) High / Medium / Low
3B) You summarise information effectively High / Medium / Low
3C) You clearly present information High / Medium / Low

Comments
3A) Although the OET word count is flexible, ideally, the body of your letter should be approximately 180-200 words. Most
important is that you include relevant information, and to a lesser extent, that you exclude irrelevant information. If you got a
low score here you may have included too many irrelevant details or left out some important information.

3B) In order to be concise, you need to summarise the relevant information efficiently and effectively.

3C) You need to make sure that the information in your letter is clear and concise. It cannot be convoluted or 'inefficient'.

4) Genre and Style

4A) Your writing is clinical and factual High / Medium / Low
4B) Your writing is appropriate to the reader’s discipline and knowledge High / Medium / Low
4C) You use technical terms, abbreviations and polite language appropriately for the reader High / Medium / Low

Comments
4A) Clinical and factual.

4B) Considered.

4C) Well done.

5) Organisation and Layout

5A) Your letter organisation is appropriate, logical and clear High / Medium / Low
5B) Your letter highlights key information High / Medium / Low
5C) Your letter subsections are well organised High / Medium / Low
5D) Your letter is well laid out High / Medium / Low

Comments
5A) Well organised.

5B) Well structured.

5C) Well organised paragraphs.

5D) Well laid out.

6) Language
6A) Your overall language use makes meaning clear High / Medium / Low
6B) Your vocabulary is precise so your meaning is clear High / Medium / Low
6C) Your grammar is accurate so your meaning is clear High / Medium / Low
6D) Your sentence structures are accurate and so your meaning is clear High / Medium / Low
6E) Your spelling is accurate High / Medium / Low
6F) Your punctuation is accurate High / Medium / Low
 Comments
6A) Clear.

6B) Please use words that are immediately clear. You do not have to use 'fancy' or 'obscure' words. You need to be more
precise in your word choice.

6C) You should use grammar that makes your meaning as clear as possible. You do not need to use a 'variety' of 'fancy'
grammar. Clarity is key. You may want to watch the following lessons:
Present verbs: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-ylF0KRL7tw
Past verbs: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ofPn6XL5LkU
Active vs Passive: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=luGbWWz5I2E&t=1071s
Articles: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CbIXbBAVJ9E&t=900s

6D) Accurate.

6E) Please work on your spelling.

6F) Correct.

Next Steps
Please carefully note the errors you have made. Rewrite to fix the errors. Pay careful attention to the HIGH, MEDIUM and
LOW scoring. Remember: This is the same scoring system as the test.

Further Study Recommendations

My recommendation for you to take a 1:1 tutorial to discuss your issues in more depth and to receive live corrective
feedback is:

High