ESSAY INFORMATION:

Written by: Xuân Phi, 20/02/2023

Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 21/02/2023
Question: Technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you
think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
(IELTS Academic – 18/02/2023)

ANSWER (8.0+):
The way minors spend their leisure hours has been altered by advancements in
technology. Although this can detrimentally affect their overall health, I believe that its
benefits such as accessing information more easily and boosting their creativity are more
significant.

On the one hand, the tendency of children to utilize technological devices in their spare
time has an adverse impact on their general well-being. More specifically, many of the
activities that children engage in with technology are sedentary, such as playing video
games or using social media. This can lead to reduced physical activity, which in turn can
contribute to health problems such as obesity and poor vision. Furthermore, children’s
mental health can be badly affected. Since they often spend an excessive amount of time
using digital devices in lieu of interacting with others in person, their interpersonal
relationships would likely be weakened. Consequently, they become socially isolated and
suffer from mental issues such as depression and stress.

On the other hand, using technology in leisure time can be beneficial to children for two
reasons. Most noticeably, technology has made it easier for juveniles to access
information on a wide variety of subjects. To be more specific, they can use search
engines, educational apps and online libraries to learn about topics that interest them.
This can help to broaden their knowledge and foster their passion for learning. Another
justification is that it enhances creativity. This is because there are many digital tools and
apps that allow children to express themselves. For instance, they can show their artistic
side by using video editing software and digital art programs to create and share their
own works of art or videos, which can be a source of pride and satisfaction.

In conclusion, although technological advances can pose a threat to children’s holistic

health, I maintain that they can offer more noticeable advantages such as easy access to
information to broaden their knowledge and promoting their sense of expression. It is
advisable that children should be allowed to use technology in their study and personal
lives under parental supervision to mitigate its demerits.
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ENGLISH TIẾNG VIỆT

Minors Trẻ vị thành niên

Leisure hours Giờ giải trí

Reduced physical activity Hoạt động thể chất bị giảm thiểu

Poor vision Thị lực kém

Interpersonal relationships Mối quan hệ giữa các cá nhân

Socially isolated Bị cô lập về mặt xã hội

Search engines Công cụ tìm kiếm

Foster their passion for learning Nuôi dưỡng niềm đam mê học tập của họ

Digital art programs Chương trình nghệ thuật kỹ thuật số

Holistic health Sức khỏe toàn diện

Promote their sense of expression Thúc đẩy khả năng biểu đạt của họ

Under parental supervision Dưới sự giám sát của cha mẹ

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