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ACTIVITY 13 Maintaining Unity

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 Number five, I think it is not with the text, because it explains the rating of the movies, not why you
like the movie

 Number ten, I think it is not consistent with the text, because it explains the classification of the films,
it does not define

Building Better Sentences: For further practice, go to Practice 6 on page 236 in Appendix 1.

Element 5: Coherence
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 The day of magician.
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 The work of magician.


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Transitional Words and Phrases


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5PDPNQBSFPSDPOUSBTU in contrast by comparison on the other hand
5PTIPXUJNF finally after before
5PFNQIBTJ[F for these reasons obviously without a doubt
5PTIPXTFRVFODF first (second, third, etc.) next at the same time
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For more information on transitions and connectors, see the Brief Writer’s Handbook with Activities,
pages 220–222.

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