Developing paragraph

Students should not work part-time. What is your opinion? Support your answer with
examples.
Agree Disagree

1. Unable to focus on studies 1. Instill noble values

2. Lose momentum in their studies 2. Earn pocket money
3. Socialize with older people 3. Help to reduce crime rate

Content 1
Firstly, students should not work part-time is true because they unable to focus on
studies. By working, they tend to skip their classes if shifts overlap their schedules.
As a worker, their schedules are not well organized and regular and some of them
will work until late at night even they have homework from teachers. Thos can be
seen in school, students who have been working at night most likely to fall asleep
during classes. They neglect their studies and not paying attention in class. They
also have no time to revise their learning in school because they have been busy
working during the night. This can cause their grades fall down badly and may leads
to depression. They may not face this kind of situation if they stop working and
leisure their gold time by having good hobbies and activities. Thus, working part-time
job make students unable to focus on studies.
Content 2
Next, students who are working part-time job will lose momentum in their studies. As
the working, they will be distracted with salary and freedom while studies not give
them any money or freedom. For enhance, students who have money usually spend
their money on what they have been dreamed because they afford to do so. They do
not need to study first to get money for the result they not taking part in examination
and classes in school. The worst part is when they giving up in their studies and
decide to work as their priorities. For example,my friend before working part-time
was a excellent student who was the top in the school, but after she works part-time
at a restaurant, she tends to skip school a lot and no sitting for examination. Now her
exam results are declining even she revises learning at home. Hence, working part-
time can lose momentum in studies.
Content 3
Moreover, students who are working part-time will socialize with older people. Older
people’s life are different from students because they had finished studies and now
works as their priorities. Some people face the reality of their unhappy work situation
cause stress and depression. Older people tend to relieve their stress by smoking
and drinking alcohol after a tiring day of work. This negative habit can entice
students to follow the same way if they are stress when working. To illustrate , I have
a friend who is good and polite towards other people, but when he started to work, it
was no longer as it used to be. He started to smokes even when he is in school , he
brought them and smoked in the back of school. Although I have remind him all the
several times but he ignores and even distances himself from me at school.
Consequently, working part-time make students socialize with older people .