Class code: 231_71ENG610063_23

Student’s name: Đặng Ngọc Mỹ Trâm

Peer editor’s name: Lại Vũ Thiên Trang
Date: 03/11/2023

WRITING ASSIGNMENT – LESSON 16

Unit: 10
Topic:

 1st draft

For a long time, statistics have shown that the main role of childcare in the family is
often still that of the mother. Today, however, the percentage of stay-at-home fathers is
increasing, and this increase is almost a phenomenon.
It is undeniable that the global economy is going down. Many men workers have been
sacked; consequently, they stay home, do household chores, and care for children. To
begin with, for example, in careers such as teaching or marketing, women are always
appreciated, and this has made it easier for them to find a job than men. Furthermore,
another reason why husbands’ roles have changed in recent years is the acceptance of
society for them to become nannies instead of going to work and supporting the family.
On the other hand, children who are growing up need more love and care, which they
can get more clearly from their mothers. First of all, women have a natural instinct to
provide care and comfort. No matter how hard they try, fathers cannot instill the values
that a mother can instill in her children. Therefore, this affects parenting. Furthermore,
fathers cannot handle both household chores and childcare Besides, according to
researchers, women are said to be multitasking.
To sum up, there are various factors that could be counted for the trend that fathers
staying at home and taking care of children and mothers going out for work, However,
I would strongly believe that this progress is certainly positive.

 Self-assessment (checklist)
Content Y/N Comments/ Suggestions
Task Response
Does the essay contain at least 250 words?
Is the topic addressed in the introduction?
Does the thesis statement discuss both
questions as required?
Does the conclusion summarize the main
points and give the author’s final opinion?
Is each of the paragraphs related to the topic?
Coherence & Cohesion
Does the essay have an introduction, two body
paragraphs, and a conclusion?
Is there a clear topic sentence in each
paragraph?
Does the author include any relevant examples
and/or other supporting details (explanation,
reasons, etc.)?
Are there at least 4 transitional expressions
used correctly (e.g. Moreover, However, In
fact, etc.)
Lexical Resource
Has the topic question been paraphrased
properly?
Does the writer repeat the vocabulary?
Are there any spelling errors?
Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to
the topic?
Grammar Range and Accuracy
Does the author use a range of simple,
compound, and complex sentences?
Have the verb tenses and subject-verb
agreement been checked?
Has punctuation been used correctly?
Time management
Was the task completed within 40 minutes?

 Peer assessment (checklist)

Content Y/N Comments/ Suggestions
Task Response
Does the essay contain at least 250 words?
Is the topic addressed in the introduction?
Does the thesis statement discuss both
questions as required?
Does the conclusion summarize the main
points and give the author’s final opinion?
Is each of the paragraphs related to the topic?
Coherence & Cohesion
Does the essay have an introduction, two body
paragraphs, and a conclusion?
Is there a clear topic sentence in each
paragraph?
Does the author include any relevant examples
and/or other supporting details (explanation,
reasons, etc.)?
Are there at least 4 transitional expressions
used correctly (e.g. Moreover, However, In
fact, etc.)
Lexical Resource
Has the topic question been paraphrased
properly?
Does the writer repeat the vocabulary?
Are there any spelling errors?
Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to
the topic?
Grammar Range and Accuracy
Does the author use a range of simple,
compound, and complex sentences?
Have the verb tenses and subject-verb
agreement been checked?
Has punctuation been used correctly?
Time management
Was the task completed within 40 minutes?
 Final version

 Rubric for grading

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