THESIS STATEMENT

-The centralidea of a multiple-

paragraph composition.
 Necessity of College
Education
College education is
important.
Getting a college degree is
important because it will equip a
student to become a professional in
his/her chosen field and it will
widen his/her perspective of the
world.
More of a title than a
thesis statement.
Broad statement
Accurately written thesis
statement: one subject
and at least two
arguments.
Topic: Jogging
Topic: Why is jogging beneficial?
Thesis Statement: Jogging is beneficial
because it positively affects physical
wellbeing and mental fitness.
Topic: Tagaytay City
Topic: Is Tagaytay an enthralling city of the
South?
Thesis Statement: Tagaytay City is an
enthralling city of the South because of
the beautiful landscape, amazing people
and sumptuous food.
Topic: Cebu City
Topic: Why is Cebu City called
the Queen City of the South?
Thesis Statement:
1. It should be written in a complete sentence
with a clearly stated subject.
DON’T DO
Computers as helpful tools in teaching Computers can help a teacher
and researching effectively impart the lesson and
research information.
Rewrite the following:
Irrelevance of difference
between men and women in terms of
their human rights.
2. It should not be too narrow nor too broad,
and should contain at least two details.
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Many events in the history of the In the history of the Philippines,
Philippines contributed to the changes People Power I was one of the major
in the country. events which changed our country,
especially in its culture, structure, and
politics.

Rewrite the following:

Men and women are different.
3. Avoid an awkward thesis statement which states the
obvious. These statements usually start with the
phrase “I will tell you.. Or I will talk about…”
DON’T DO
I will tell you about how the increase in An increase in the number of squatters
the number of squatters in Metro in Metro Manila can be attributed to
Manila can be attributed to the effects the effects of overpopulation and
of overpopulation and gentrification. gentrification.

Rewrite the following:

Today, I will talk about how the gender
of job applicants affects the judgment
of employers when hiring.
4. Enumerated details should have the same level of
significance. If one of the details can be classified
under another detail, you can omit.
DON’T DO
Overseas Filipino Workers (OFWs) Overseas Filipino Workers (OFWs)
help raise the country’s economy, add help raise the country’s economy and
more revenues, and promote the promote the hospitality of the
hospitality of Filipinos. Filipinos.

Rewrite the following:

Awareness of gender discrimination
can lead to decrease of sexual
harassment, decline of domestic
violence, and fewer cases of spousal
abuse.
5. It should not state an absolute fact, because it will
not present any central idea that can be developed
further. It should have a point.
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Rizal Park is located in Manila. Rizal Park, which is located in Manila,
is a reminder of our nationalism and
revolution.
Rewrite the following:
Maria Clara is a character in Jose Rizal’s
novel, Noli Me Tangere.
TOPIC SENTENCE
-guides, controls and unifies ideas in a paragraph.
- can be explicitly or implicitly stated.

EXPLICIT – beginning, at the middle and at the end of

the paragraph, OR at the start and end of the
paragraph
IMPLICIT – not directly seen in a paragraph. Reader
has to deduce what the topic sentence is.
 Tips in Writing an Effective Topic Sentence
1. It should follow the basics already discussed in the thesis
statement.
2. It should one detail which is related to one of the details in
the thesis statement.
SAMPLE THESIS STATEMENT: Rizal Park, which is located in
Manila, is a reminder of our nationalism and revolution.
DON’T DO

Rizal Park features a statue of Jose Rizal and is also Rizal Park, which features a statue of Jose Rizal, stands
known as Luneta Park. as a reminder of the Filipinos who sparked the
revolution and launched our fight for freedom.

Try it! Sample thesis statement: A person should not be stereotyped, because there
are various factors which make everyone different, such as religion, ethnic
background and social class.
Rewrite the following topic sentence:
Religion is a major influence in people’s
faith; those who do not have a religion
must be evil.
3. It should vary in structure across paragraphs. If the topic
sentences are uniform throughout your essay, they might
seem monotonous to read. Varying the structure will also
enable you to stress important parts.
4. If the composition is just one paragraph, the topic sentence
should be straightforward.
 DON’T DO

Many times, in many places, and across
cultures, language is used as a dividing
force and point of difference when in fact
it is a major factor that can promote unity
in diversity.
Language should not be seen as a dividing
force, but as a tool to promote unity in
diversity across cultures.

Rewrite the following topic sentence:

It should be known by everyone that

harmful stereotypes surround every
society, every community and every city,
and they are the worst kinds of epidemic
because when passed on, they trickle to
the next generation and create a vicious
cycle.