What about mobility in Cali?

I believe that the figures from the Traffic Department of the city of Cali are in accordance with
reality, for example: The motorization rate is increasing; there are currently 224 vehicles per
1000 in habitants, which has increased congestion by 50% compared to 2015, and poses a
significant challenge for any plan attempted by local authorities to control the mobility
situation in Cali.

In fact, part of the projects that the current administration has proposed to solve mobility in
Cali, include:

First, anti-traffic brigades, incentives for citizen culture and education, and a lot of investment
in large infrastructure works. However, any decision I am incredulous after years and years of
road chaos in the capital of salsa.

For me, the mobility problems in Cali are the corruption and lack of direction of Metrocali, the
body in charge of the Integrated Mass Transit System of Mine, they have not been of great
help to the population of the Valley, who complain of having a collapsed system and full of
complaints for delays in frequencies, street vendors, few routes, poor condition of the
stations, and buses and poorly qualified personnel, after seven years of operation. I believe
that travel times in the critical areas of Cali should be improved, especially in the south and the
center of the city, Example: that the p-24E passes every 10 minutes through the different
terminals. Also how to strengthen, with the help of Metrocali, the effective implementation of
the financing mechanisms of the Mass Transportation System, MIO.

In conclusion, I believe that by applying these solutions, especially that of reducing travel, so
that each route does not take more than 10 minutes to pass, we will guarantee fluidity, and
less congestion, inviting people to use the city's mass transport.

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i believe smoking should be banned in places public. Firstly, these spaces should be free-of
smoke for people to enjoy. I’m not against people smoking. I’m just against Smokers not
respecting the the rights of others to breathe clean air. People is right to want clean air.
Secondly, whit many people smoking in bars and clubs, this makes my clothes smell. I hate the
smell of my clothes after being in these places. Finally, breathing second hand smoke is
dangeros and can cause problems in the future. People has a greater chance of developing
cancer if they are in smoky places for long periods. To conclude, the government have
prohibited this activity.