Kim Chi: 3/10

Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there was a rocket (rocketing) trend
in the percentage of people eat beef (eating) while pork and turkey (???) remained
stable. Having witnessed the lowest rate at the beginning of the period, and then
(???) the broilers saw a dramatically increase in 2012.
main trend sai, còn nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, thiếu phần introduction
Đức Minh: 7/10
The line graph illustrates trends in the US meat and poultry consumption over a
47-year period between 1955 and 2012.
Overall, what stands out from the line graph is that there was a considerable
upwards (upward) trend in the broiler's consumption, while the consumption of
beef and pork both saw fluctuations (fluctuations) over the period in question.
Another interesting point is that the consumption of turkey remained unchanged
between 1955 and 1985, but in 1988, it went up slightly and remained stable until
2012.
Main trend thứ 2 không hợp lý, còn sai vài lỗi ngữ pháp
Ngọc Anh: 3/10
The line graph below illustrates information about how many pounds of US's meat
and poultry consumption over a period of 57 years (cần có năm khởi đầu và kết
thúc) (chỗ này em phải xuống dòng). Over the period shown, the pounds of Beef
(???), Pork, turkey remained stayble, whereas the Brolier's pounds was increased
after 57 years. (lặp từ)
Chưa chỉ ra được main trend, sử dụng từ key word không đúng, còn sai chính
tả
Hà Linh: 1/10
The graph give insight into about the number of Us meat and poultry were sold per
capita, boneless, by species.
Over 17 years, while Beef went down, Broliers went up and if we look at the
Turkey, it does not decline or increase.
Bài viết chưa chỉ ra được main trend, các câu chưa được kết nối, từ vựng và
ngữ pháp còn sai rất nhiều
Bảo Châu: 2/10
The graph shows information about the trends in US meat and poultry
consumption from 1955 to 2012.(cần tách đoạn ở đây). Đầu câu cần có từ Overall
What stands out from the graph is that there was gradual trend in the income of
Boiler's, while the beef was the most popular meat in 1976.
Chưa viết lại được đề bài=> vốn từ còn rất hạn hẹp
Chưa chỉ ra được main trend của bài
Hoàng Anh: 7/10
the (đầu câu viết hoa) graph illustrates data about how much meat and poultry was
consumed in US over a 57-year period between 1955 and 2012(phải có chấm câu)
(tách đoạn)
(viết hoa) overall, it can be seen that there were significant upward trends in the
broilers consumption, while the amount of beef and pork went down slightly over
the time period covered by the graph. It is also noticeable that beef was by far the
most popular of the four types of meat for the majority over 57 years but a
dramatically rise in consumption of broilers surpassed all in 2012.
Chỉ ra được tương đối đầy đủ main trend, các câu được kết nối khá tốt, độ
chính xác về ngữ pháp tương đối tốt, từ ngữ phong phú. Cần chú ý viết hoa và
tách đoạn cũng như dấu câu.
Phương Linh 8/10
The graph gives information about how many pounds of boneless meat and poultry
were consumed by each person over a 57-year period commencing since 1955.
Overall, there were upward trends in the proportion of broilers and turkey, whereas
beef and pork showed a downward trend over the period. It is apparent that the
percentage of broilers experienced a dramatic increase.
Chỉ ra đầy đủ main trend, từ ngữ và ngữ pháp đa dạng
Gia Linh: 5/10
The graph shows information about the number of U.S meat and poultry
consumption from 1955 to 2012 and the data was recorded every three years
during the period (???) (tách đoạn). In general what stands out from the the graph
is that there were rose in both Broilers and Turkey, while Beef was slightly
declined over the period and Pork was leveled off.
Chưa chỉ ra hết được main trend, còn thiếu chính xác về từ vựng và ngữ
pháp,
Diệu Linh: 5/10
Introduction: The graph shows information about how much meat and poultry was
consumed in four sectors (cần nói rõ 4 mặt hang ở đây) the consumption in US.
Overview: Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable
increase (ngữ pháp) in the consumption rates of both broilers and turkey sector,
while the consumption rates of beef and pork saw a negligible fall over the time
period covered by the graph. Another interesting point is that beef sector was the
most popular the consumption rates (ý này không đúng)\
Các ý phát triển chưa đầy đủ, ngữ pháp còn sai
phạm Tuấn:
The graph give (ngữ pháp) insight into the number (ngữ pháp) of US meat &
poultry consumption, per capita, boneless (diễn đạt), by species over the period of
55 years between 1955 - 2012.
In general, there is a downward trend from the consumption.
Chưa chỉ ra được main trend, phần introduction viết còn sai nhiều về ngữ
pháp và diễn đạt=> lười học
Huỳnh Trang: 3/10
In general, while the amount used of boilers and turkey (diễn đạt sai) experienced
the (an) upward trend, the consumption of beef and pork had the (a) downward
trend. Additionally, the highest point was the beef consumption in 1976 and the
lowest point was the act of eating turkey in 2012.
chưa chỉ ra được main trend, diễn đạt còn lủng củng, chưa viết phần
introduction
Hồng Ngọc
Overall what stands out from the graph is that there were slight increase (ngữ
pháp) in the consumption of both pork and turkey, while the use of broilers saw a
considerable rise over the period in the question. Beef was consumed dramatically
between 1961 and 1982, and fell in 2012. (câu này quá cộc, cần có từ nối)
Mới viết được một overall trend, chưa viết introduction, còn sai ngữ pháp và
diễn đạt
Hiển Vinh: 6/10
Introduction: The line graph shows information about the amount of meat and
poultry was consumed per capita from 1955 to 2012 in the US.
Overview: Overall, what stands out from the graph is that beef has been consumed
most out of all four types through decades especially (sai chính tả, từ này thể
hiện quan điểm không nên sử dụng ở task 1) between 1955 and 1976 when beef
consumption rose from around 60 to a peak of 90 pounds per person per year
(không được đưa con số cụ thể vào đây) whereas pork consumption remain
stable.
Mới chỉ ra được 1 main trend, cần chú ý cách diễn đạt và không đưa con số
chi tiết ở phần overall
Thiên Hương: 4/10
The graph illustrate (NP) information about how much meat and poultry were
consume (NP) in the U.S over the period of 17 years, from 1995 to 2012. (xuống
dòng) Overall what stands out from the graph (sai cấu trúc), the amount of beef
which bought (sai NP) by The U.S witnessed a considerable fluctuation over the
period. As regards, there was a stable remain in pork consumption. Another
interesting point,
Em cần cái thiện độ chính xác về ngữ pháp, bài viết chưa chỉ ra hết được main
trend
Ngọc Liên: 4/10
intro: the graph illustrates data about the amount of US meat and poultry
consumption were sold over the period (sai ngữ pháp) – sentence fragment In
overall, beef saw a considerable increase but it was fallen significantly after and
the Pork was fluactuated (NP) while the consumption of turkey and boilers were
increased stringkingly (run-on sentence)
Sai rất nhiều về ngữ pháp, main trend chưa rõ ràng
Quỳnh Chi: 5/10
The line graph illustrates trends in US meat and poultry consumption (thiếu thời
gian). Overall, it is apparent that the consumption of broilers witnessed a upward
trend while the consumption of beef showed some fluctuation (s). Simultaneously,
the consumption of pork and turkey remained stable. (thiếu main trend)
còn thiếu mốc thời gian, chưa chỉ ra được main trend thứ 2
Minh Tâm: 3/10
The line graph compares the U.S meat and poultry consumption per capital ,
boneless,by species (tách đoạn) Principally, the rate in the 4 kind(s) of meat tend(s)
to rise marginally. Following this gragh ,we can see the broilers 's meat that has the
fastest rising rate just before the turkey 's meat (sau that phải là mệnh đề, ngoài ra
diễn đạt chưa rõ ý) .And the other two which is beef the highest and pork the 2nd is
tend to fall gradually
em cần phải chú ý về dấu câu, em chưa paraphrase lại được đề bài, chưa có
mốc thời gian, bài viết sai quá nhiều ngữ pháp, chưa chỉ ra được main trends
Đạt: 4/10
The line graph sketches out (informal) the amount of meat which is consumed per
capita boneless and species in U.S over a 57 -year period between 1955 and 2012.
In general both pork and turkey still remain the prosperous (NP) (diễn đạt) over the
period, comparing between beef and broilers which had a steadily soar in 57 years
(câu không rõ nghĩa) . The position of these kinds of meat had been changed due to
the consumption through 57 -year period , the highest - beef had a gradual falling
to the second after touching the peak in 1976 , on the other hand both broilers and
pork rose slightly to the first and the third. Over the period turkey is still remained
as the fourth place of meat consumption . (
em chưa nắm được cách viết introduction và overall trend, rất nhiều câu thừa
không cần thiết
Trần Hồng Ngọc: 7/10
The table indicates information about the amount of boneless meat and poultry by
species was consumed per capita over a 57-year period between 1955 and 2012
(sentence fragment). (tách đoạn) Overall, what stands out from the graph is that
there was a significant increase in consumption of beef and broilers in the US over
a 51-year period from 1961 to 2012, while turkey's and pork's remained stable.
Another point of the graph is that at the beginning of the period, the amount of
beef's consumption was on the top but in the end of the period, it was replaced by
broilers.
Phần main trend về beef chưa đúng, còn sai ngữ pháp