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1. My first impression of the essay is that it addresses several important points related to the
modernization and improvement of the education system in India. The essay highlights the role of
the internet in education, the need for universal learning, the shift from physical books to digital
resources, the importance of creativity and technology adoption, and the ultimate purpose of
education.
2. The points that I would add:
(i) The idea of giving students credits for online learning is a practical way to promote self-learning
and encourage students to explore additional courses.
(ii) The notion of aligning the education syllabus with universal concepts to make Indian students
more competitive globally is a commendable goal.
3. The essay generally flows well and uses transition words to connect ideas. However, there could
be some improvement in the organization of the essay to make it more cohesive. It could benefit from
a clearer introduction that presents the main points to be discussed and a stronger conclusion
summarizing the key ideas.
4. The opening of the essay is somewhat effective in introducing the importance of online learning
and the need for recognizing online credits. However, the conclusion is relatively weak; it could be
improved by summarizing the main arguments and reinforcing the idea of adapting and evolving the
education system.
5. The grammatical errors are:
(i) Most of the students have started learning classes online and gain certificates.
Correction: Most of the students have started taking classes online and gaining certificates.
(ii) govt should accept the credits they have secured through online modes.
Correction: The government should accept the credits they have secured through online modes.
(iii) This will surely develop self-learning in oneself and will also encourage the student to learn extra
courses.
Correction: This will surely promote self-learning in oneself and will also encourage the student to
learn extra courses.
(iv) The things that one learns should be in coincidence with the universal concepts.
Correction: The things that one learns should coincide with the universal concepts.
(v) one of the most complained things about schol life is the weight of the backpack.
Correction: One of the most complained things about school life is the weight of the backpack.
(vi) no matter what whether it will work or not
Correction: no matter whether it will work or not.
(vii) learning from the pro is no shame India should learn and adopt (of course with prior permission)
the leading technologies and develop.
Correction: Learning from the professionals is nothing to be ashamed of. India should learn and
adopt (of course with prior permission) the leading technologies and develop.
(viii) It is no doubt that India is currently having the right system.
Correction: There is no doubt that India is currently having the right system.
(ix) Simply understanding the concept, memorising and retrieving it at the time of need is the result
of successful education.
Correction: Simply understanding the concept, memorizing and retrieving it at the time of need is
the result of successful education.
6. The spelling errors are:
(i) school – school
(ii) govt – government
7. The essay addresses important issues in education and proposes practical solutions. It could benefit
from improved coherence and transitions between ideas. Additionally, some grammatical and
spelling errors need correction for better clarity. The opening and conclusion could be strengthened
to leave a lasting impact on the reader. Overall, it's a thoughtful essay with room for refinement.