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Dr George Lopez
Pediatrics
Chebucto Rd
Kentiville
Dear Dr Lopez
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I am writing to inform you regarding your patient Lauren Goldsmith, that she has a Commented [ur7]: WBCs or WBC count
congenital kidney defect,that needs to be surgically treated to prevent future urinary Commented [ur8]: with
tract infections and renal failure. Commented [ur9]: properly: therefore,
• Lauren initially presented with mother in emergency with the complaint of fever Commented [ur10]: was
for two days. Her temperature was 104.7 and blood test showed elevate WBC.
Fever was relieved temporarily from ibuprofen. Baby was irritable and did not eat
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properly, therefore admitted in the pediatric floor, Zoysn started for suspected
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infection as well as ibuprofen for fever. She continued to have fever and elevated
WBC. Her Urine culture found positive for E. Coli infection, therefore Bactrim Commented [ur13]: was
started and Zoysin discontinued. Commented [ur14]: an
Should you have any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me. Commented [ur21]: her congenital kidney defect
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Word Length 185
Comments
1. The purpose is apparent in the introduction but is not clearly
explained in the conclusion.
2. The letter tries to include relevant case notes, but somerequired
information is missing.
3. An attempt to organize the content logically is seen, but order of
information and paragraphing need much more improvement in
places.
4. In addition, there are few inaccuracies related to vocabulary,
basic grammar and sentence structure.
5. A lot of errors regarding past tense use.
6. Overall, the letter needs much improvement.
Estimated Grade C
Estimated Score 300/500
Advice 1. Convey the purpose of the document generally in the
introduction.
2. Always read and select case notes carefully.
3. Avoid basic grammar errors.
4. Improve choice of words.
5. Improve tense usage.
6. Improve coherence/paragraphing.
7. Always proofread the letter after finishing it.
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