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Basics of Writing Activity Sheet
Basics of Writing Activity Sheet
Revise the following sentences to emphasize the perspective of the audience and the “you” view.
a- We regret to announce that the bookstore will distribute free iPods only to students in classes in
which the instructor has requested these devices as learning tools.
b- Our safety policy forbids us from renting power equipment to anyone who cannot demonstrate
proficiency in its use.
c- To prevent us from possibly losing large sums of money in stolen identity schemes, our bank now
requires verification of any large check presented for immediate payment.
d- So that we may bring our customer records up-to-date and eliminate the expense of duplicate
mailings, we are asking you to complete and return the enclosed card.
Revise the following sentences to make the tone conversational yet professional.
a- Per your recent e-mail, the undersigned takes pride in informing you that we are pleased to be able to
participate in the Toys for Tots drive.
b- Pursuant to your message of the 15th, please be advised that your shipment was sent August 14.
c- Yo, Jeff! Look, dude, I need you to pound on Ramona so we can drop this budget thingy in her lap.
Revise the following statements to make them more positive and courteous.
a- Employees are not allowed to use instant messaging until a company policy is established.
b- We must withhold authorizing payment of your consultant’s fees because our CPA claims that your
work is incomplete.
c- Plans for the new health center cannot move forward without full community support.
Inclusive Language
Revise the following sentences to eliminate terms that are considered sexist or that suggest
stereotypes.
b- Media Moguls hired Sheena Love, an African American, for the position of project manager.
c- A skilled assistant proofreads her boss’s documents and catches any errors he makes.
Guffey, M. E., & Loewy, D. (2014). Essentials of business communication. Mason, OH: South-Western/Cengage Learning.