Teacher: Meg Strauss Date: February 17th, 2016

School: Holyoke Junior High School Grade Level: 8th

Content Area: English
Title: Draft 2 Lesson #:_15_ of _16_

Colorado State Standards Addressed:

Standard 3.3.d: Produce clear and coherent writing in which the development,
organization, and style are appropriate to task, purpose, and audience.
Standard 3.3.e: With some guidance and support from peers and adults, develop
and strengthen writing as needed by planning, revising, editing, rewriting, or trying
a new approach, focusing on how well purpose and audience have been addressed.
Understandings:
Students will add revisions to their writing circle members personal memoirs.
Inquiry Questions:
How can peer edits be used to enhance your writing?
Evidence Outcomes: (Learning Targets)
I can: add revisions to my peers personal memoirs.
This means: I can also get feedback from my peers on my draft in order to
enhance my writing.

List of Assessments:
- Students will be given a completion grade. Students must have their second
personal memoir draft completed.
- Students will be graded on the depth of their peer feedback.

Planned Lesson Activities

Name and Purpose of Name: Draft 1
Lesson
Purpose: Students will add revisions to their writing circle members
personal memoirs.
Approx. Time and
Materials Duration of Unit: 50 minutes

Materials: Computer, Google Docs, Peer Evaluation Form

Anticipatory Set Students will be given a completion grade on their second personal
 memoir draft. Students will be asked to get into their writing circle
groups.
Procedures Teacher Actions Student Actions

1. 5 minutes- 1. 5 minutes-
Announcements Actively listen to announcements.
Question Answer attendance question
attendance:
What is your
favorite state? 2. 5 minutes-
2. 5 minutes- Show my teacher my first draft of my
Give completion personal memoir to receive a
grade for completion grade.
students who
have not yet
received a
completion grade
for their second
draft

3. 10 minutes
Get into my writing circle
3. 10 minutes- Share my personal memoir with
Tell students to members of my writing circle through
get into their google docs
writing circles Read and edit a personal memoir I
Tell students to have not yet read
edit one personal Answer evaluation questions on google
memoir they docs
have not yet read
After five
minutes, have
students answer
evaluation
questions on 4. 10 minutes
google docs Read and edit another personal
4. 10 minutes memoir I have not yet read
Tell students to After five minutes, answer evaluation
read another questions through google docs
personal memoir
they have not yet
read
After five minutes
have students 5. 15 minutes
answer Review peer revisions and evaluation
evaluation questions
questions on Spend the remaining time editing my
google docs. second draft
5. 15 minutes
Tell students to
 review revisions
and evaluation
questions
Tell students to
spend the next
few minutes 6. 5 minutes
editing their Write an exit slip that answers the
second draft question, What is different between
my first draft and my second draft?

6. 5 minutes-
Tell students to
an exit slip that
answers the
question, What
is different
between my first
draft and my
second draft?
Closure Students will write an exit slip that answers the question, What is
different between my first draft and my second draft?
Assessment - Students will be given a completion grade on whether or not they
have their first draft of their personal memoir completed
- Students will be given a grade on the depth of their
feedback.
Differentiation - Students will be placed in their writers circles
Notes to Self - Will students use workshop time wisely, or will they spend it
messing around?
Peer Review:

You are required to read and edit two peers personal memoirs. These peers will be from your

writing circle. You must not edit the same peers papers as you did in the first drafting process.

As you edit your peers work, fill out this sheet:

Is the writers voice authentic and effective?

Is this personal memoir free of grammatical and spelling errors?

Did this story intrigue you?

Did the introduction immediately engage you? If not, how can it be improved?

Was the story easy to follow?

What themes and topics are displayed in the story?

Is the conclusion reflective? Does it tie the whole narrative together? If not, how can the

conclusion be improved?