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Jianyu Hong
English 101
Prof. Hofmann
Introduction Activity.
The introduction lacks attention catching clause. For instance, an anecdote would have
introduced the topic or a fact that relates to the kind of discipline applied to children. The writer
anecdote. Another point is that the thesis statement is weak because it sounds like an
announcement.
Proposed Introduction.
Discipline is a crucial aspect that influences the growth and character of children.
temporarily inhibiting an unfavorable behavior displayed by children. Some people think it’s
okay to spank their children for punishment whereas a portion differs with the act. Physiological
punishment serves to recruit the positive or negative emotions of the child. Accordingly, there
are better ways to teach discipline which done involve long-lasting effects. Spanking children
can be harmful because it can cause psychological trauma, and leave lasting physical scars.