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First of all, why do people, or mostly teenagers, cyberbully? Because they are hiding behind
the screen.Nobody can reach them therefore they are very relaxed.Just create anounymus
account and they can do whatever they want.This is horrible for innocent people.
number.Because if person uses identification number polices find him easily.And judged by
law however, if the website owner is malicious person we are finished.Website owner use
our identification number and will be rich therefore governments should making laws like
imprisonment for a long time or wifi banned forever for him.İn every way governments
should a find solution quickly because it makes people's days worse therefore peoples will
suicade
As a result ıf governemnts want a great society they should find a solution and teaching
Oğuzhan, this is too short. There are only two sentences in introduction and the conclusion,
and they are very short sentences. Thesis statement is missing in the introduction. The first
body doesn’t discuss laws at all. Besides, don’t ask questions in your essay. This is not a blog
post. In the second body, you don’t emphasize the necessity of laws against cyberbullying.
You are not expected to discuss the reasons of or solutions to cyberbullying. Your essay is
slightly off-topic.
Grade
Paragraphing 2 pts/1
Coherence 4 pts/1
Total: 17