Class code: 231_DTA0600_40

Student’s name: LE THANH TRUC

Peer editor’s name: Nguyễn Thị Thảo My
Date:28/09/2023

WRITING ASSIGNMENT – LESSON 7___

Unit:
Topic:

Sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005

• 1st draft

The bar chart provides information on educational attainment by age in the UK in 2010.

Overall, the majority of people between the ages of 16 and 50 have a bachelor's degree,
while the majority of those 75 and older do not have a degree. Notably, there is parity in
the proportion of people completing high school in all age groups, except for the oldest
group. Second, looking at the chart we can see that 76% of people aged 24 to 35 have
graduated from university, followed by ages 16 to 24 and 25 to 50, both of these ages have
equal proportions. together . Finally, people age 75 and older have graduated from high
school and decided not to go to college.

• Self-assessment (checklist)

• Peer assessment (checklist)

Content Y/N Feedback

Task Achievement
Does the report contain at least 150 words? Y
Has the author paraphrased the topic in the
Y
introduction?
Has the overview presented the most significant
feature of the line chart(s) (e.g. the trend, the N
highest/ lowest range of data, etc.)?
Has the report covered the most significant
features (e.g. the trend, the highest/ lowest Y
range of data, etc.)
Coherence & Cohesion
Has the information been grouped into
N
paragraphs clearly?
Is the information presented in a logical order? Y
Are there at least 3 transitional expressions
used correctly (e.g. First, Besides, Overall, Y
etc.)?
Lexical Resource
Are there any spelling errors? Y
Does the author repeat the vocabulary? Y
Does the text contain vocabulary specific to line
Y
graphs?
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Are the sentences grammatically correct? N
Does the writer use punctuation correctly? N
Does the writer check verb tenses and subject-
Y
verb agreement?
Timing
Was the task completed within 20 minutes? Y

• Final version

The bar chart provides information on educational attainment by age in the UK in 2010.
Overall, the majority of people between the ages of 16 and 50 have a bachelor's degree,
while the majority of those 75 and older do not have a degree. Notably, there is parity in
the proportion of people completing high school in all age groups, except for the oldest
group. Second, looking at the chart we can see that 76% of people aged 24 to 35 have
graduated from university, followed by ages 16 to 24 and 25 to 50, both of these ages have
equal proportions. together . Finally, people age 75 and older have graduated from high
school and decided not to go to college.

• Rubric for grading

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