Class code: 222_71ENG610063_19

Student’s name: HUỲNH NGỌC PHƯƠNG DUYÊN

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Date: 6/1/2023

WRITING ASSIGNMENT – LESSON __3_

Unit: 6

Topic: The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

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Task Achievement

Does the report contain at least 150 words? y

Has the author paraphrased the question in the
y
introduction?
Has the overview presented the most noticeable feature of
the pie chart(s) (e.g. the highest proportion, the main y
difference/similarity, etc.)?
Has the report covered the significant features (the biggest/
y
smallest proportions, or differences/ similarities)?
Coherence & Cohesion

Has the information been grouped into paragraphs clearly? y

Is the report presented in a logical order? y

Are there at least 3 transitional expressions used correctly
y
(e.g. First, Besides, Overall, etc.)?
Lexical Resource

Has the question been paraphrased properly? y

Does the author avoid repeating vocabulary? y

Does the report contain vocabulary specific to pie charts? y

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

Are the sentences grammatically correct? y

Has punctuation been used correctly? y

Have the verb tenses and subject-verb agreement been
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checked?
Timing

Was the task completed within 20 minutes? n

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The pie charts give information about the top reasons people came to and left the UK in 2007.

In general, it is clear that the main factors driving migration to the UK were definite job and
formal education. Additionally, the percentages of immigration and emigration in the
remaining four categories were comparable.

The largest elements of immigration, which accounted for 30%, and emigration, which
accounted for 29%, were both primarily driven by definite jobs. Only 12% of immigrants
came from the UK looking for work, but 22% of people left the country for this reason.
Formal education accounts for 26% of all immigration-related reasons. However, only 4% of
emigrants left for this reason, a remarkably low percentage.

It is fascinating that the accompanying rates of immigrants and migrants in the UK are quite
similar at 15% and 13%, respectively. While only 17% of respondents gave an explanation for
immigration, 32% of emigrants gave another reason or no explanation.
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